Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar, clarity and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and noun phrases, and avoid unnecessary fillers. Use one or two supporting details (where/when you rode it, a memory) linked with simple connectors like “and” or “because.” Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I rode it almost every day around my neighborhood when I was in primary school, and I remember racing my friends to the park. Because the streets were quiet then, I felt very free and confident riding on my own.

提案: Clarify and tighten your response. Begin with a direct opinion sentence, then give two specific reasons linked with connectors like “because” and “for example.” Correct grammar (plural/singular, tense, gerunds) and avoid fillers. Keep it natural and concise (2–3 sentences).

例: I don’t think bikes are very popular in my country. This is mainly because roads are crowded with cars, so riding a bike can be dangerous, and there are few dedicated bike lanes to protect cyclists.

× there are so many car on the road

✓ there are so many cars on the road

The noun 'car' must be plural after 'many'. Use 'cars' to agree with the determiner 'many'. Suggestion: make the noun plural when using quantifiers like 'many'.

× it's quite dangerous when you riding the bike on the road

✓ it's quite dangerous when you ride the bike on the road

The clause describes a general situation, so use the base form 'ride' after 'when you' for present simple. The original used 'riding' incorrectly without an auxiliary. Suggestion: use 'you ride' for habitual or general statements.

× I had a bike when I was child

✓ I had a bike when I was a child

English requires the indefinite article 'a' before the singular count noun 'child' in this context. Suggestion: include 'a' before singular count nouns when speaking of one unspecified example.

× I always write it uh, around and when I was primary school student

✓ I always rode it around when I was a primary school student

The original has several issues: 'write' is the wrong verb here (context implies riding a bike), tense should be past ('rode') to match 'I had a bike' and 'when I was...'; 'a' is needed before 'primary school student'. Suggestion: choose the correct verb ('ride' -> past 'rode') and include the article 'a', and combine phrases into a single past-tense clause.