Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Reduce hesitation and grammar errors, answer directly with a clear topic sentence, and provide one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms (use 'I had' not 'I did had'), avoid vague time phrases, and keep the response within 3–4 concise sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I remember riding it every afternoon around my neighborhood for about seven years, which made me very happy. Because I could explore nearby streets and visit friends easily, those were some of my fondest childhood memories.

提案: Answer directly and use accurate vocabulary and statistics cautiously. Start with a clear opinion, then add specific reasons and linking words (for example, 'because' or 'therefore'). Avoid unclear phrases ('boys are popular') and be concise—two to three supporting points are enough.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. Many teenagers and working adults use them because they are cheaper than cars and help avoid heavy traffic. For example, about half of young people I know cycle to school or college, especially in crowded cities.

× I did had a bike when I was a child and as far as I can remember, it was my happiest day ever when I was cycling my bike in the neighbor, uh, at the last seven years with it.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child and, as far as I can remember, I was happiest when I rode my bike around the neighborhood for about seven years.

The auxiliary 'did' is incorrectly used with the past tense main verb 'had' (double past). Use the simple past 'I had'. 'It was my happiest day ever when I was cycling my bike' is awkward and mismatched in number/time: use 'I was happiest when I rode my bike'. 'In the neighbor' is incorrect preposition and word form; use 'around the neighborhood'. 'At the last seven years' is ungrammatical; use 'for about seven years'. Suggestions: remove unnecessary 'did' for simple past, use 'ride/rode' for cycling actions in past, use correct preposition 'around' and time expression 'for/about seven years'.

× Yeah, it was a beautiful old days.

✓ Yeah, those were beautiful old days.

'It was a beautiful old days' mixes singular 'it was' with plural 'days'. Use plural agreement: 'those were'. Alternatively use singular: 'it was a beautiful old day'. Suggestions: match subject and verb number and choose correct demonstrative for plural 'those' or change 'days' to singular.

× Yeah, indeed. Uh, boys are popular in my country, approximately 50% of all teenagers and the men have a bike and they use it, uh, to go to work or study or whatever they do because of the traffic, to avoid the traffic and the place easily without any trouble.

✓ Yeah, indeed. Bikes are popular in my country; approximately 50% of all teenagers and men have a bike, and they use it to go to work or study or for other short trips to avoid traffic and get around easily.

The original uses 'boys are popular' which is incorrect semantically and grammatically; the intended subject is 'bikes'. Also 'the men' is unnecessary definite article; use 'men'. Repetition 'because of the traffic, to avoid the traffic' is redundant. 'The place easily' is unclear; use 'get around easily'. Suggestions: ensure the subject matches the intended noun ('bikes'), remove unnecessary articles, avoid repetition, and use clear phrases like 'get around' or 'for short trips'.