Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer direct, grammatically correct, and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No), then give one or two specific supporting details. Use correct verb tenses (past simple) and avoid repetition. Link ideas with simple connectors like 'because' or 'so'. For example, say you didn’t have a bike, explain that your parents bought one for your younger brother because of his height, and mention briefly how you coped (e.g. borrowed other bikes).

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. My parents bought a bike for my younger brother because he was small and needed a smaller size, so I often borrowed bikes from friends when I wanted to ride.

提案: Begin with a clear opinion sentence and then give two specific reasons with proper vocabulary and clearer linking words. Use correct grammar (e.g., 'bikes are really popular') and avoid vague phrases like 'right where everywhere.' Provide concrete examples such as affordability, convenience for short trips, or road conditions that affect cycling. Keep it concise (max 3–4 sentences).

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient for short trips. For example, many people use bicycles to commute to work or the market. However, bad roads and heavy traffic sometimes make cycling difficult in some areas.

× I think I didn't have a bike because when I was a little child, I have a little brother who wants a bicycle, but his height was shorter than me, so when my my bicycle would be big for him, so father bought.

✓ I don't think I had a bike because when I was a child I had a little brother who wanted a bicycle, but he was shorter than me, so my bicycle would have been too big for him, so my father bought one for him.

Multiple past-tense inconsistencies: use past simple for past facts and habits. 'I think I didn't have' should be 'I don't think I had' or 'I didn't have' but with surrounding past verbs 'was', 'wanted' etc., 'I had' is correct. 'I have a little brother' should be 'I had a little brother' to match past context. 'Wants' -> 'wanted'. 'His height was shorter than me' is awkward; use 'he was shorter than me'. 'My my' is a typo. 'Would be big for him' should be 'would have been too big for him' to express hypothetical in the past. Add 'one' to indicate the bicycle purchased. Suggestions: keep all verbs in past simple when describing past events, avoid repeating words, and use appropriate modal/perfect forms for past hypotheticals (would have been).

× In my opinion buys a really popular in my country because it is affordable and it can be right where everywhere like you know Bumpy Rd.

✓ In my opinion, bikes are really popular in my country because they are affordable and can be used almost anywhere, like on bumpy roads.

The sentence has incorrect word order and wrong word forms. 'buys a really popular' is ungrammatical; the subject 'bikes' is needed and verb 'are' for present general statements. Use plural 'bikes are'. 'It is affordable' should be 'they are affordable' to agree with plural subject. 'It can be right where everywhere' is incorrect; use 'can be used almost anywhere' to convey meaning. 'Bumpy Rd' should be 'bumpy roads' in plural and lowercased 'roads'. Suggestions: ensure subject-verb agreement with plural nouns, place adjectives/adverbs in correct positions, and use clear verbs like 'used' for ability/location.