Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is direct and natural but too short. To score higher, give a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details (e.g., when you got it, how often you used it, a short memory). Use a linking word if you add more details. Keep to under five sentences.

例: Yes, I did. I got a small red bike when I was about seven and rode it to visit friends every afternoon. It helped me learn balance quickly, and I have fond memories of racing on the park path with my neighbours.

提案: Your response answers the question but has grammar errors and is slightly disorganised. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give specific supporting reasons and an example. Use linking words (for example, because, however) and correct articles/plurals (e.g., “bikes” not “bike”). Keep it concise (1–3 sentences).

例: I don't think bikes are very popular in Hong Kong. Because public transport and cars are so convenient and the streets are crowded, most people prefer buses or the MTR rather than cycling. For example, many commuters find it easier to use the MTR for long journeys.

× I don't think bike is popular here but cause usually people take public transport so in Hong Kong I would say drive or public transport.

✓ I don't think bikes are popular here because usually people take public transport or drive in Hong Kong.

The sentence uses the singular noun 'bike' where the plural 'bikes' is required when speaking about bicycles in general. Also 'cause' is informal and ambiguous; 'because' is correct. Reordering improves clarity: 'people take public transport or drive in Hong Kong.' Suggestion: use plural for general statements about countable nouns (bikes), replace informal 'cause' with 'because', and keep parallel structure for verbs ('take public transport or drive').