Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural. Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid repetition ("buy one" vs "buy any of them"), and add a brief specific supporting detail (reason or a short memory). Use a linking word when adding the detail.

例: No, I didn't have a bike as a child. I wasn't interested in cycling, so my parents never bought one for me; instead, I preferred reading books and playing indoor games.

提案: Good clear response with relevant details. Improve cohesion by using linking words and a more precise phrase (e.g., "short distances"). Add one concrete example or comparison to make it more specific.

例: Yes, bicycles are very popular, especially among teenagers. For example, many students cycle to school because it's cheap and quicker than walking; moreover, cycling is seen as both a fun pastime and useful exercise.

× I wasn't really interested in bikes back then, so my parents never bought one for me and I never forced them to buy any of them.

✓ I wasn't really interested in bikes back then, so my parents never bought one for me and I never forced them to buy one.

The original uses 'any of them' to refer to a single bike, which is awkward and incorrect in this context. Use 'one' to refer back to 'a bike'. This is a sentence structure/pronoun reference issue; replace the plural expression with the singular 'one' to match the singular noun 'a bike'. Suggestion: Use consistent reference forms: when referring to a single item previously mentioned as 'a bike', use 'one' rather than 'any of them'.

× they also find bikes a cheap and convenient way to travel short distance.

✓ they also find bikes a cheap and convenient way to travel short distances.

The phrase 'short distance' is missing pluralization when used with 'travel' in a general sense; idiomatically, use 'short distances'. This is a preposition/phrase usage error affecting noun number. Change to 'short distances' to make the expression natural and grammatically correct. Suggestion: Use plural 'distances' when talking about travel in general: 'travel short distances'.