Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a clear, concise topic sentence that directly answers the question, then add one specific supporting reason using correct tense and grammar. Avoid repetition and keep it to no more than 2–3 short sentences. Use linking words if you add details (for example: because, so, therefore).

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my parents couldn't afford one. As a result, I usually walked to school or used public buses, which made me less confident riding on busy roads later on.

提案: Start with a direct answer, then give two clear, specific reasons linked with simple connectors. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., "bikes", "young people", "affordable", "convenient") and avoid unclear phrases. Keep sentences short and fluent and limit hesitations and false starts.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and easy to park. Also, many young people use them for short trips in crowded cities, as bikes are quicker than cars in heavy traffic.

× No, I didn't have back when I was child because my parents afforded to.

✓ No, I didn't have one when I was a child because my parents couldn't afford it.

The sentence has multiple past tense and word-choice errors. 'Back when I was child' should be 'when I was a child' (missing article). 'Afforded to' is incorrect; the correct past-tense negative is 'couldn't afford it.' Also you need a reference word for 'bike'—'one.' Suggestion: use 'couldn't afford' for past inability and include articles and objects: 'I didn't have one when I was a child because my parents couldn't afford it.'

× My parents can't afford to.

✓ My parents couldn't afford to.

The question asks about childhood, so past tense must be used. 'Can't' is present tense; change to 'couldn't' to match past context. Also 'afford to' should be followed by an object or verb, but in this elliptical sentence 'afford to' is understood; better: 'couldn't afford it.'

× My parents couldn't afford to buy.

✓ My parents couldn't afford to buy one.

The verb phrase 'afford to buy' needs an object: 'one' (a bike). The sentence correctly uses past tense 'couldn't,' but omits the object. Add 'one' to clarify meaning: 'My parents couldn't afford to buy one.'

× Yes, bakes are very popular in my country.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country.

This is a spelling error causing a wrong word 'bakes' (plural). The intended noun is 'bikes' (plural), which matches the context. Ensure correct spelling 'bikes.'

× Most youngsters are.

✓ Most youngsters are (already) bikers.

The sentence is incomplete; 'Most youngsters are' needs a complement. Supply a noun or adjective, e.g. 'bikers' or 'keen on biking.' Maintain present-tense and complete the idea: 'Most youngsters are bikers.'

× I prefer to buy eggs because of of the cheap rate and they can medium too convenient for uh, short trips, especially in covered cities.

✓ I prefer to buy bikes because they are cheap and convenient for short trips, especially in crowded cities.

This sentence has many errors: 'buy eggs' is wrong word choice; should be 'buy bikes.' 'Because of of the cheap rate' has duplicated 'of' and awkward phrasing—use 'because they are cheap.' 'They can medium too convenient' is ungrammatical; use 'and convenient.' 'Uh' is filler and should be removed. 'Covered cities' is likely 'crowded cities.' The corrected sentence uses proper adjectives and word order: 'they are cheap and convenient for short trips, especially in crowded cities.'