Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more precise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, use past tense consistently, avoid casual words like 'hired' if you mean 'borrowed' or 'rented', and add one specific supporting detail with a linking word. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was in primary school. It was yellow with black stripes and a small basket on the front, which I used to carry my books. Because it was lightweight, I could ride it to school and around the neighborhood every day.

提案: Make the answer clearer and grammatically correct: give a direct opinion, then explain with a specific example. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct phrases like 'scan the QR code' and 'ride them to places'.

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular, especially in cities. For example, my city has a shared-bike system: people can scan a QR code on a bike and ride it to different places, which makes short trips convenient and affordable.

× I hired a bike when I was in primary school.

✓ I had a bike when I was in primary school.

The student used 'hired' (past tense of 'hire') which means 'rented' and is unlikely here; more importantly, the intended meaning is possession in the past, so use 'had' (simple past of 'have'). This fixes verb choice and tense consistency with the question about possession in childhood. Suggestion: use 'had' for past possession; use 'hired' only if you mean 'rented'.

× It had a yellow and black stripe.

✓ It had yellow and black stripes.

The original uses 'a yellow and black stripe' which mismatches the singular article with two colors and a bike typically has multiple stripes. Use plural 'stripes' without the indefinite article to correctly describe multiple markings. Also adjective order is fine; simply adjust number agreement. Suggestion: match singular/plural and omit 'a' when describing multiple features.

× My city even has shared bike people can scan the QR code and write them to everywhere.

✓ My city even has shared bikes; people can scan a QR code and ride them everywhere.

The sentence lacks proper connectors and has several errors: 'shared bike' should be plural 'shared bikes'; missing conjunction or punctuation to separate clauses; 'write them to everywhere' is incorrect verb choice and structure—likely intended 'ride them everywhere'. Also 'scan the QR code' should be 'scan a QR code' or 'scan the QR codes'. Corrected version separates clauses with a semicolon and uses appropriate verbs and plurality. Suggestion: use plural nouns for general statements, add conjunction or punctuation between clauses, and choose the correct verb ('ride') for bicycles.