Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, use correct grammar (articles and verb forms), avoid repetition, and add one specific detail. Use linking words to connect ideas. Limit to 2–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bike as a child. My sister helped me learn on her bike when I was very young, and later my parents bought me my own bike, which I used to ride to visit friends and explore the neighborhood.

提案: Give a clearer structure: state your opinion, briefly explain the two types with correct terms, and give a specific example or reason. Use linking words (for example, however) and avoid repetition and informal phrasing. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. For example, there are motorbikes, which require a license and are mainly used by adults, and regular bicycles or cycles, which people of all ages use for commuting and exercise.

× Yes, I used to ride bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I used to ride a bike when I was a child.

The sentence needs the indefinite article 'a' before the singular countable noun 'bike'. This is an article error but because it directly affects the verb phrase with 'ride', it is corrected here. Suggestion: use 'a bike' for a single, non-specific bicycle.

× From younger age onwards, my sister supported me in learning how to ride bike and I used to learn it in my sister's bike.

✓ From a young age onwards, my sister helped me learn how to ride a bike and I used my sister's bike to practice.

Multiple preposition and word choice issues: 'From younger age' should be 'From a young age'; 'supported me in learning' is better as 'helped me learn'; 'ride bike' needs article 'a'; 'learn it in my sister's bike' is incorrect preposition and verb choice: use 'used my sister's bike to practice'. Suggestion: use 'from a young age', 'helped me learn', and 'used ... to practice'.

× Later my parents bought me a new bike for me and I love traveling with that.

✓ Later my parents bought me a new bike, and I love riding it.

Redundant 'for me' after 'bought me' should be removed. 'Traveling with that' is unnatural for a bicycle; use 'riding it'. Suggestion: avoid repeating indirect object and use appropriate verb for bicycles: 'ride'.

× I think bikes are popular.

✓ I think bicycles are popular.

The original is not strictly ungrammatical, but 'bikes' is informal; 'bicycles' is more natural in formal speech. No change in number required, this is a stylistic improvement. Suggestion: use 'bicycles' for clarity in tests.

× We got two types of bikes.

✓ We have two types of bikes.

'Got' is informal and can be misinterpreted; 'have' is the correct present-tense verb to describe general facts. Suggestion: use 'have' for general states: 'We have two types of bikes.'

× 1 is like the speed bikes which can be used only by adults and we do need license for that and the other bikes we also use the term cycles for that.

✓ One type is sport or motorbikes, which can only be used by adults and require a license, and the other type are called cycles.

Several structure and word choice issues: start with 'One type' not '1'; 'speed bikes' unclear -> 'sport or motorbikes'; 'which can be used only by adults' -> 'which can only be used by adults'; 'we do need license for that' -> 'require a license'; 'the other bikes we also use the term cycles for that' -> 'the other type are called cycles.' Suggestion: break into clearer clauses and use 'require a license' and 'are called cycles.'

× For the cycles are usually used by adults, children and everything and from from my side.

✓ Cycles are usually used by adults and children, in my opinion.

The original has extraneous words and incorrect prepositions: remove 'For the' and duplicate 'from'; 'and everything' is vague; 'from my side' should be 'in my opinion' or 'from my point of view'. Suggestion: say 'Cycles are usually used by adults and children, in my opinion.'