Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar, fluency and coherence. Use a clear topic sentence then one or two supporting details. Correct past-tense forms and avoid repetition. For example, say you had a bike, describe how often you used it and where you went, and use linking words (e.g., "so", "because", "for example"). Keep it under five sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I rode it almost every day to visit friends and to go to the park, so it was my main way of getting around. For example, I remember cycling to school in the mornings and racing with my neighbors on weekends.

提案: Be more concise and organize ideas logically. Start with a clear opinion, then give two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid filler words and repetition; use correct grammar (subject–verb agreement) and clearer phrasing (e.g., "children" instead of "kids" and "parents go to work").

例: Yes, I think bicycles are becoming more popular in my country. One reason is that children cannot drive cars, so they use bikes to travel to school and friends; another reason is that many parents are busy with work, which makes cycling a convenient and affordable option.

× Yes, I had.

✓ Yes, I did.

The question uses past simple ('Did you have...'), so the appropriate short affirmative response is 'Yes, I did.' Using 'I had' is a past-tense full verb form but sounds incomplete and unnatural here. Use the auxiliary 'did' for short answers to past simple questions.

× I always go to.

✓ I always went everywhere by bike.

The speaker is recalling a habitual action in the past, so past simple 'went' should be used rather than present 'go.' Also the fragment 'go to' is incomplete; specify the object or rephrase as 'went everywhere by bike.' Ensure tense matches the context (past).

× I always go to everywhere with my bike and I run everywhere.

✓ I always went everywhere by bike and I rode my bike everywhere.

The original mixes incorrect preposition use and an inappropriate verb ('run') when referring to moving by bike. 'Go to everywhere' is ungrammatical; use 'went everywhere.' Use 'by bike' or 'rode my bike.' Also maintain consistent past tense for a past habit.

× In my opinion, I think it's getting umm, popular in my country because for the kids they can't, they can't drive a car in the parents are always going out, always, always going to the job, work.

✓ In my opinion, I think bicycles are becoming more popular in my country because children cannot drive cars and parents are always going out to work.

The sentence mixes present continuous and awkward phrasing. Use 'are becoming' or 'are getting' to express a present trend. 'Kids' is fine but 'children cannot drive cars' is clearer. Remove redundant hesitations and correct noun phrases: 'going out to work' rather than 'going to the job, work.' Keep subject-verb agreement and clearer word order.

× So when they need a bike to go everywhere.

✓ So they often need a bike to get around.

As a final clause, the original is a sentence fragment lacking clear tense and flow. Rephrase to a complete sentence: 'So they often need a bike to get around.' This uses proper verb and idiomatic expression and fits the context.