Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammar and coherence errors. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then add one or two brief supporting details. Use correct tense and simple grammar (e.g., “I didn’t have a bike when I was a child”). Keep to 1–3 sentences and avoid irrelevant fragments.

例: I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. My family couldn’t afford one, so I usually walked to school; I remember feeling a little jealous when my friends rode theirs.

提案: The idea is understandable but the sentence structure and word choice are confusing. Begin with a clear opinion sentence, then give specific supporting reasons using linking words (because, so, therefore). Use correct vocabulary (e.g., “middle class” not “middle middle class”) and avoid unclear phrases.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in Sri Lanka because they are affordable and practical for short journeys. For example, many middle-class families choose a motorcycle or scooter to avoid traffic and save on fuel.

× No I never had bike in my since I'm child so I like it but better than how?

✓ No, I never had a bike since I was a child, so I like them, but how is that better?

Errors: missing article 'a' before 'bike' (Article errors, ID 22); incorrect preposition 'in my since I'm child' and wrong tense/person. Correction uses 'since I was a child' (correct preposition and past tense) and adds comma separation for clarity. Also changed 'I like it' to 'I like them' to refer to bikes in general or could keep 'it' if singular; adjusted ending to a clear question 'but how is that better?'. Suggestion: always use articles with singular countable nouns (a/an/the), use 'since' with a clause in past tense ('since I was...'), and ensure pronoun number matches the noun referenced.

× Yeah, it's true there is Siri. Middle middle class country wall of papers can afford only bike. So I think bikes are famous in Sri Lanka.

✓ Yes, it's true. In Sri Lanka, people in the lower and middle classes can only afford bikes, so I think bikes are popular there.

Errors: unclear phrase 'there is Siri' and 'Middle middle class country wall of papers' are sentence structure and word choice errors (Sentence structure errors, ID 26). Also article and plural usage mistakes: 'only bike' should be 'only afford bikes' (Article errors ID 22 and Singular/plural ID 1). Correction clarifies 'In Sri Lanka' and uses 'people in the lower and middle classes' and plural 'bikes'. Suggestion: reorganize sentences for clarity, use correct country name 'Sri Lanka', use plural for general statements about affordability, and place clauses ('In Sri Lanka') at sentence start for coherence.