Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời cần tự nhiên hơn, sửa ngữ pháp và thêm chi tiết cụ thể. Nên trả lời trực tiếp (topic sentence) ở thì quá khứ, tránh lỗi thừa từ như “it”. Dùng 2–4 câu hỗ trợ với liên từ để làm rõ cảm xúc, tần suất hoặc kỷ niệm.

例: Yes, I did. My father bought me a small red bike when I was seven, and I rode it almost every day after school. Because I practiced a lot, I learned to ride without training wheels within a week and often rode with my friends in the neighborhood.

提案: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng, ngữ pháp chuẩn và mạch lạc. Trả lời trực tiếp rồi giải thích vì sao, sử dụng liên từ để nối các ý và cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể (thống kê, lý do, so sánh). Tránh đảo trật tự từ và thiếu mạo từ.

例: Not really. Most people in my country prefer motorbikes because they are faster and more convenient for city traffic. For example, many commuters use motorbikes to get to work, especially in crowded urban areas, so bicycles are mainly used for leisure or exercise.

× Yes, I have a bike that my father bought it for me.

✓ Yes, I had a bike that my father bought for me.

The sentence mixes present tense 'have' with past context 'bought'. Use past tense 'had' to match 'bought'. Also the relative clause 'that my father bought it for me' contains an unnecessary pronoun 'it' (redundant object). Use 'that my father bought for me' or 'which my father bought for me'. Suggestion: Use consistent past tense and remove redundant pronoun: 'I had a bike that my father bought for me.'

× I don't think so in my country's people often. Travel by motorbike.

✓ I don't think so. In my country, people often travel by motorcycle.

The original has incorrect word order and misplaced phrases. 'In my country's people often.' is incorrect: 'my country's' should not directly modify 'people' here; use 'In my country, people...'. Also 'Travel' should be lowercase and connected to the subject 'people' as 'people often travel'. 'Motorbike' is acceptable but 'motorcycle' is more natural. Suggestion: Rearrange into correct English word order, include a comma after the introductory phrase, and use the simple present 'people often travel' for habitual action.