Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Bạn trả lời trực tiếp nhưng có lỗi phát âm/vay lỗi từ ("bite" thay vì "bike"), lặp từ và câu hơi lủng củng. Cần: 1) sửa phát âm từ quan trọng (bike), 2) tránh lặp (bỏ một trong các "when I"), 3) làm câu rõ ràng với một câu chủ đề và 1-2 chi tiết hỗ trợ, không quá 5 câu, dùng một liên từ nếu cần.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents bought it for me, and I used to ride it around the neighborhood every afternoon. It was bright red and very sturdy, so I felt confident learning new tricks on it.

提案: Câu trả lời ngắn, không đầy đủ chi tiết và có lỗi ngữ pháp ("bike are" thay vì "bikes are"). Cần: 1) dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, 2) sửa ngữ pháp số nhiều, 3) thêm một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: vì sao phổ biến, ở đâu, ai dùng nhiều), 4) dùng liên từ để nối ý và làm mạch lạc.

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country. Many children use them for fun and older people ride them for exercise, especially in parks and quiet streets. Also, in some cities people choose bikes for short trips because they are cheap and convenient.

× Yes, when I when I was a child, I used to have a bite that my parents bought for me.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I used to have a bike that my parents bought for me.

The student wrote 'bite' which is a spelling error; correct word is 'bike'. Also there is a repeated phrase 'when I' which is redundant. The tense 'used to have' is appropriate for a past habitual situation, so keep it. Suggestion: remove the duplicate 'when I' and correct the spelling to 'bike' to make the sentence clear and grammatical.

× I think in my country bike are popular for a lot of people like children or old people.

✓ I think in my country bikes are popular among many people, such as children and elderly people.

The noun 'bike' should be plural 'bikes' to match the plural verb 'are' and the general idea of many bicycles. Also 'for a lot of people like' is awkward; use 'among many people, such as' for natural English. 'Old people' is better expressed as 'elderly people'. Suggestion: use plural nouns for general statements, use 'among' to indicate a group, and prefer 'such as' to introduce examples.