Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar, accuracy and add a short supporting detail. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then add one or two specific details using a linking word. Keep to no more than 3–4 sentences and avoid redundancy.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small red bicycle with training wheels, and I learned to ride it in my neighborhood park. Because my parents encouraged outdoor play, I used it almost every day after school.

提案: Use correct grammar, be more precise and provide a specific reason or example. Begin with a topic sentence, then add one supporting detail with a linking word (for example, because or for instance). Avoid sweeping generalisations and keep to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country. For example, many children in my neighborhood own bicycles because they are a cheap and convenient way to get around short distances.

× Yeah, I have a bike when I child.

✓ Yeah, I had a bike when I was a child.

The question asked about the past ('Did you have... when you were a child?'), so the student should use past tense. 'Have' (present) is incorrect; use past tense 'had'. Also 'when I child' is missing the article and verb; it should be 'when I was a child'. Suggestion: use past tense verbs for past situations and include the verb 'be' ('was') for age/time expressions.

× Yeah, I have a bike when I child.

✓ Yeah, I had a bike when I was a child.

The phrase 'I child' is ungrammatical because a noun 'child' cannot directly follow the subject without a verb. The correct pronoun/phrase is 'I was a child' where 'was' is the past tense of 'be'. Suggestion: use the correct subject+verb combination for time expressions: 'when I was a child'.

× Yeah, I think it's popular in my country because all of children in my area have bike.

✓ Yeah, I think they're popular in my country because all of the children in my area have bikes.

The student used 'it's' (it is) which is singular, but 'bikes' is plural in the question; use a plural pronoun 'they're' to refer to 'bikes'. Also 'have bike' is missing plural 'bikes'. Use present simple for general facts ('I think they are popular'). Suggestion: match pronoun number to the referenced noun and use plural nouns when speaking about more than one item.

× Yeah, I think it's popular in my country because all of children in my area have bike.

✓ Yeah, I think they're popular in my country because all of the children in my area have bikes.

The phrase 'all of children' is missing the definite article 'the' before 'children' when referring to a specific group. Also 'have bike' lacks the plural noun. Suggestion: use 'all of the children' or 'all the children' and pluralize the noun after 'have'.

× Yeah, I think it's popular in my country because all of children in my area have bike.

✓ Yeah, I think they're popular in my country because all of the children in my area have bikes.

Using 'it's' (it is) to refer to 'bikes' causes subject-verb disagreement: plural subject requires plural verb form 'they are' (they're). Also ensure nouns agree in number ('bikes'). Suggestion: ensure pronouns and verbs agree in number with the nouns they refer to.