Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammatical accuracy, use a clear topic sentence, and add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb tenses (use past), fix vocabulary mistakes (writing → riding), and avoid redundancy. For example, start with a direct answer, then say when and how often you rode and describe one memory to make it vivid.

例: Yes, I did. I had a blue bicycle from the age of six and I often rode it around my neighborhood after school. In addition, I sometimes rode with my friends to the park, which made my childhood feel very lively and colorful.

提案: Give a clear direct answer and then support it with specific reasons or examples. Fix vocabulary and grammar (bags → bikes; remove filler words; use correct quantifiers and relative clauses). Use linking words like 'because' or 'for example' to connect ideas and provide one concrete reason and one example.

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them for short commutes and errands. For example, in my city you can see cyclists on most main roads during rush hour, and many families own at least one bicycle for daily use.

× Yes, I have a bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike.

The examiner asked about having a bike when you were a child, which requires past tense. Use 'had' (simple past) to match the past time reference. Suggestion: use past tense verbs when talking about past situations (e.g., 'When I was a child, I had a bike').

× When I were a child I usually go on the street by writing it.

✓ When I was a child I usually rode my bike on the street.

Multiple errors: 'were' should be 'was' for first person singular in past (subject-verb agreement). The verb 'go' should be past habitual 'rode' to match 'usually' referring to past habit. 'by writing it' is incorrect—likely intended 'riding it' and the object should be 'my bike'. Suggestion: use 'was' with 'I' in past, use past tense for habitual past actions, and use the verb 'ride' (riding) with correct object ('my bike').

× It give me a very colorful childhood.

✓ It gave me a very colorful childhood.

The sentence refers to a past event, so the verb should be past tense 'gave' not 'give'. Also 'it' refers to the bike experience; ensure past tense agreement. Suggestion: use simple past 'gave' when describing effects in the past.

× I do think bags are very popular in my country because.

✓ I do think bikes are very popular in my country.

The student wrote 'bags' instead of 'bikes', likely a typo or wrong word; also the sentence ended with 'because.' which is incomplete. Correct the noun to 'bikes' to match the question, and remove the dangling 'because' or complete the clause. Suggestion: ensure the noun matches the topic and avoid sentence fragments; finish 'because' clauses (e.g., 'because many people use them').

× There are so many, so much people riding bikes on the road.

✓ There are so many people riding bikes on the road.

Use 'many' with countable plural nouns like 'people', not 'much'. Remove the comma and the redundant 'so' pair. Suggestion: use 'many' for countable nouns and avoid pairing 'so many, so much'; write 'There are so many people' or 'Many people ride bikes on the road.'