Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is direct and clear, which is good. To improve, add one brief supporting detail (e.g., who gave it to you, how often you used it, or a short memory) and use a linking word if you add more than one detail. Keep it natural and concise (max 4–5 sentences).

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents bought it for me on my seventh birthday, and I rode it almost every day around the neighborhood. Because of that, I became quite confident riding on busy streets.

提案: The answer is unclear and contains hesitation and a grammatical error. To improve: state your main opinion directly, give one or two clear, specific reasons, and avoid filler words. Use linking words (for example, because, however, therefore) to connect your points. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and correct grammar (e.g., "because kids are" -> "because most kids don't have them").

例: I don't think bikes are very popular in my country because most children prefer motorbikes or cars and many families can't afford bicycles. Therefore, you see fewer kids riding bikes in cities than in the past.

× For me, bikes are not popular in my country because kids are. Uh. Most of the kids don't have a bike.

✓ For me, bikes are not popular in my country because most kids don't have a bike.

The original contains fragmented and redundant phrases ('because kids are. Uh.') that break sentence structure and clarity. This is a sentence structure error (type 26). Combine ideas into one clear subordinate clause: 'because most kids don't have a bike.' Remove filler words like 'Uh.' For improvement, plan the sentence before speaking, avoid fillers, and connect clauses correctly using conjunctions (because + clause).