Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and grammatically correct. Start with a direct topic sentence that answers the question, then give one or two specific supporting details. Correct tenses (use past tense), avoid filler words (uh), fix vocabulary errors (ride, not write), and reduce unnecessary self-introduction unless prompted.

例: Yes, I did. My father bought me a bicycle when I was seven, and I rode it twice a week, usually after school. Riding helped me explore the neighbourhood and stay active.

提案: Answer directly then give specific reasons with correct grammar and linking words. Use plural/singular agreement (bikes are, they have), avoid repetition and fillers, and give concrete examples or comparisons to strengthen your point.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country, especially among children. For example, many parents encourage cycling because it improves children’s fitness and coordination, and schools often organise cycling clubs to promote a healthy lifestyle.

× Hello, my name is Ian Abu. Uh, yes, I have a bike when I was a child and which was uh brought, brought by my father and I used to write I twice a week, especially after coming back from the school.

✓ Hello, my name is Ian Abu. Uh, yes, I had a bike when I was a child, which was brought by my father, and I used to ride it twice a week, especially after coming back from school.

Errors: mixed present tense 'have' with past time reference 'when I was a child' and incorrect verb 'write' instead of 'ride'. Also unnecessary article 'the' before 'school' and awkward clause 'and which was brought' placement. Suggestion: Use past tense 'had' to match the time frame, use 'which was brought by my father' as a relative clause without the extra 'and', replace 'write' with the correct verb 'ride', use 'ride it' to refer to the bike, and use 'school' without 'the' for general reference. Grammar problem type ID:6

× Absolutely, uh, by were really popular among children in our country, uh, because it can improve the physical activity of the children and it have a positive impact, uh, impact on their overall well-being and every time have a bike.

✓ Absolutely, bikes are really popular among children in our country because they can improve children's physical activity and have a positive impact on their overall well-being, and many children always have a bike.

Errors: 'by were' is nonsensical; subject and verb are misordered. Mixed singular/plural pronouns and verbs: 'it can' and 'it have' should agree with plural 'bikes' or 'they'. Repetition 'impact, uh, impact' and awkward ending 'every time have a bike'. Suggestion: Use clear subject 'bikes' with plural verb 'are', use plural pronoun 'they' and 'have' to agree, simplify phrase to 'children's physical activity', remove repetition, and rephrase final idea as 'many children always have a bike' or 'children often have bikes'. Grammar problem type ID:26