Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Bạn cần cải thiện: (1) Sử dụng thì và động từ đúng (ví dụ: 'liked', 'ride' → 'ride' cần 'to ride' hoặc 'rode'). (2) Tránh lặp từ vô ích như 'Uh' và câu ngắn rời rạc; trả lời trực tiếp bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng rồi thêm một hoặc hai chi tiết hỗ trợ. (3) Cải thiện phát âm một số từ (ví dụ: 'bikes' bị phát âm như 'buys'). (4) Giữ độ dài câu tối đa 5 câu, dùng liên từ để nối ý (because, so, and). Cụ thể: hãy nói “Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My grandmother bought it for me because I loved riding around the neighborhood.”

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My grandmother bought it for me because I loved riding around the neighborhood, and I often rode it with my friends after school.

提案: Bạn cần cải thiện: (1) Ngữ pháp (chủ-động từ: 'people use', 'bikes are', 'go to school or work'). (2) Tránh lặp từ và 'uh' không cần thiết; tổ chức câu theo chủ đề + lý do + ví dụ. (3) Dùng từ đúng: 'bikes' thay vì 'buys', 'harmful' thay vì 'not harm'. (4) Sử dụng liên từ để làm mạch lạc (for example, because, additionally). Cụ thể: nói một câu chủ đề rồi nêu 2 lí do rõ ràng với ví dụ ngắn.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them to commute to school or work, which is both convenient and inexpensive. For example, I often see students and office workers cycling, and many people also ride for leisure because it is not harmful to the environment.

× 'Uh, when I was a child I really like ride bicycles, so my grandma bought me a buys. Uh, yes.'

✓ 'When I was a child I really liked riding bicycles, so my grandma bought me a bike.'

'The sentence mixes past time reference with present-tense verbs (like) and incorrect verb forms (ride instead of riding). Use past tense "liked" because the time is in the past, and use the gerund "riding" after like when referring to an activity. Also "buys" is incorrect noun form; the correct singular noun is "bike". Suggestion: Use past tense verbs for past events and use gerund after like when describing habitual activities in the past.'

× 'Uh, yes, I think in my country buys very popular because, uh, many people is in my country use it for go to school to work and uh, are used for go around the city to enjoy the fresh air in in.'

✓ 'Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them to go to school and to work, and they are used to go around the city to enjoy the fresh air.'

'Multiple subject-verb agreement and noun form errors occur: "buys" should be the plural noun "bikes"; the verb linking should be "are" to match plural subject; "many people is" should be "many people use" (people is plural so use base verb "use"); pronoun reference "them" is needed for bikes; "are used for go" is incorrect — use "used to go" or "are used to go" with infinitive, and "in in" is redundant. Suggestion: Ensure plural subjects take plural verbs, use correct plural nouns, and use proper verb forms after "used".'

× 'Another reason is that buy is not harm for the environment.'

✓ 'Another reason is that bikes do not harm the environment.'

'buy' is an incorrect word choice and singular; the sentence also uses an adjective form incorrectly: "not harm" requires the auxiliary "do not" for present simple negative, and the plural subject "bikes" should match. Suggestion: Use the correct noun "bikes", form the negative with "do not" for plural subjects ("bikes do not harm"), and use the verb "harm" rather than adjective.'