Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence about whether you had a bike, then add one or two specific supporting details using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid repetition and generic generalizations. For example, mention age, who gave the bike, and a short memory to make the answer natural. Pay attention to subject-verb agreement and pronouns.

例: Yes, I did. I got a small red bike from my parents for my eighth birthday, and I used to ride it around the neighborhood every afternoon. Because my street was quiet, I felt safe practicing my balance and learning new tricks.

提案: Give a clear opinion followed by specific reasons and a linking phrase. Use correct word forms and avoid repeating words. Include at least one concrete example or statistic if possible (even approximate) to support your claim. Keep answers within 3–4 concise sentences.

例: Yes, I believe bikes are very popular in my country. One reason is that many people cannot afford a car, so they choose bicycles for short trips and commuting. For instance, in my city many students and office workers cycle to save money and avoid traffic congestion.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was a child as I I generally think that every children when he is an infant and child, he got a bike from his or her parents on its birthday.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child because I generally think that every child receives a bike from his or her parents on his or her birthday.

Multiple sentence structure and agreement issues: 'as I I' is a repetition and unclear connector — replace with 'because' to show reason. 'every children' mixes plural noun with 'every' — use singular 'every child'. 'when he is an infant and child' is awkward and unnecessary; context already indicates childhood so remove or simplify. 'he got a bike' uses past tense and a gender-specific pronoun inconsistent with 'every child' — use present simple 'receives' for general statements and neutral phrasing 'his or her' (or 'them' for singular they). Also 'on its birthday' uses 'its' for people — change to 'his or her birthday'. Overall, make it one clear general-statement sentence in present simple to express common practice. Suggestions: Use 'because' for reason, use singular after 'every', use present simple for general truths, and use appropriate personal pronouns.

× Yes, I think so. Bikes are popular in my country as as nowadays affording a car.

✓ Yes, I think so. Bikes are popular in my country because nowadays affording a car is difficult for many people.

'as as nowadays affording a car' is ungrammatical: double 'as' is erroneous and 'as' is not the best connector here — use 'because' to indicate reason. 'Affording a car' needs an adjective like 'difficult' or 'expensive for many people' to be grammatical. Also 'nowadays' should precede the clause and the sentence should clarify the problem (cost or accessibility). Suggestion: Use 'because' and add a clear adjective such as 'difficult' or 'expensive'.

× Nowadays affording a car is not for everyone, so most of the individual prefer to commute by bikes or by bicycle.

✓ Nowadays, buying or owning a car is not possible for everyone, so most individuals prefer to commute by bike.

Several issues: 'affording a car' as a noun phrase is awkward — use 'buying or owning a car' or 'affording a car' with rephrasing. 'most of the individual' is wrong: use plural 'most individuals' or 'most people'. This requires plural verb agreement: 'prefer' is correct with plural subject, but the original mixes singular 'individual' so it was incorrect. 'by bikes or by bicycle' is redundant and inconsistent; use the uncountable 'by bike' or plural 'by bicycle' but 'by bike' is idiomatic. Also add a comma after 'Nowadays'. Suggestion: Use plural subjects with matching verbs and prefer idiomatic prepositional phrase 'by bike'.