Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar (past tense and subject-verb agreement), make the response more natural and concise, and add one brief supporting detail. Use a clear topic sentence in past tense, then a short reason or memory. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I did — I had two bikes when I was a child. My grandfather and father bought them for me, and I used to ride with my friends around the neighborhood every weekend.

提案: Correct grammar and word choice (use 'among' not 'around', avoid possessive errors), be more specific about who uses bikes and why. Start with a clear opinion, then give one concrete reason or example using a linking word (e.g., 'because' or 'especially').

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among children. This is because many families find them affordable and safe for short trips, so children often ride them to school or the park.

× Yes, I have two bikes.

✓ Yes, I had two bikes.

The question asks about possession in the past (when you were a child), so the student should use the past tense 'had' rather than the present tense 'have'. Use past simple to match the time frame: 'I had.'

× When I were a child, my grandfather and father bought me those two bikes.

✓ When I was a child, my grandfather and father bought me those two bikes.

The subject 'I' requires the singular past form 'was', not 'were'. 'Were' is used with plural subjects or with 'you' and in subjunctive forms. Use 'I was' for a past simple factual statement.

× Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in around children.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among children.

The preposition 'around' is incorrect here. Use 'among' to indicate something is common within a group of people. Also 'in around children' is ungrammatical; 'among children' is concise and correct.

× But I think in my country bikes are used by children's more than others.

✓ But I think in my country bikes are used by children more than by others.

The original uses the possessive form 'children's' incorrectly; the plural noun 'children' should be used without an apostrophe. Also the comparative phrase needs parallel structure: 'used by children more than by others.' This corrects pronoun/noun form and improves clarity.