Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar, reduce repetition, and make the response more natural and concise. Start with a clear past-tense topic sentence, remove duplicated words, and add one supporting detail using a linking word. Also limit to under five sentences.

例: Yes, I did. When I was young my dad bought me a bike because I was very active, and I used to ride it to the park almost every day.

提案: Organize your answer with a clear opinion, avoid filler words and hesitations, and provide a specific reason or example. Use linking words (for example, because) and correct place names or descriptions. Keep it concise and coherent.

例: Yes, I think cycling is quite popular in Korea because many cities have riverside and park paths, such as along the Han River, where people often ride for exercise and leisure.

× Yes I have.

✓ Yes, I did.

The question 'Did you have a bike when you were a child?' is in the past tense, so the short answer should also be in the past tense. 'Yes I have' uses present perfect and does not match the past context. Use 'Yes, I did' for a correct past simple response. Also add a comma after 'Yes' for punctuation.

× When I was young my my dad bought me a bike because I was a really active child.

✓ When I was young, my dad bought me a bike because I was a very active child.

The sentence mostly uses past tense correctly ('was', 'bought'). Errors addressed: duplicate word 'my my' is a repetition (sentence structure/typo) and 'really active' is acceptable but 'very active' is more natural. Added a comma after the initial time clause for correct punctuation. No change to tense needed.

× Yeah, I guess riding a bike is pretty popular in Korea. Uh. I think we have a lot of like park and lake, like Han Liver and so so people.

✓ Yeah, I guess riding a bike is pretty popular in Korea. I think we have a lot of parks and lakes, like the Han River, so people often ride there.

Multiple issues: plural nouns needed ('parks and lakes') to match 'a lot of'; incorrect proper noun 'Han Liver' corrected to 'Han River'; unnecessary filler words 'like' repeated and 'so so people' unclear. Rewrote to clear sentence structure and maintain present-tense general statement. Added definite article 'the' before 'Han River' as it is a specific named river.