Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer grammatically correct, more natural, and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense (since it's about childhood), then briefly add one specific reason. Use linking words for coherence and avoid redundancy.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. My parents thought it would be too dangerous for me at that age, so they didn’t let me ride one.

提案: Make the response grammatically correct and more specific. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give two concise, linked reasons with specific details or examples. Use plural and correct verb forms and linking words (e.g., because, for example, and).

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among teenagers. For example, many students ride bikes to school because it’s cheap and convenient, and they often cycle to meet friends or play sports on weekends.

× No, I don't have a bike when I was a child because my parent thinks it will be dangerous for me to ride a bike during my age.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my parents thought it would be dangerous for me to ride a bike at that age.

Multiple tense and agreement errors: 'don't have' is present tense but the clause refers to the past, so use past 'didn't have' (Grammar problem type ID 6 and 5). 'Parent' should be plural 'parents' if referring to both or needs an article 'my parent' -> likely 'my parents' (Grammar problem type ID 1/22). 'Thinks' should be past 'thought' to match past timeframe (third person singular present vs past: Grammar problem type ID 2 and 5). 'Will be dangerous' should be 'would be dangerous' to maintain sequence of tenses (Grammar problem type ID 7). 'During my age' is incorrect preposition/phrase; use 'at that age' (Grammar problem type ID 11). Suggested improvements: keep past tense throughout when talking about childhood, ensure subject-verb agreement, and use natural time expressions like 'at that age'.

× Yes, I do think bikes are popular in my country especially among teenager because they usually use bike to go to school and also use their bike to play with their friends.

✓ Yes, I do think bikes are popular in my country, especially among teenagers, because they usually use bikes to go to school and also use them to play with their friends.

Several errors: 'teenager' should be plural 'teenagers' when referring to the group (Grammar problem type ID 1). Missing commas for clarity (Grammar problem type ID 26). 'Use bike' needs plural 'use bikes' to match plural subject (Grammar problem type ID 1). Repetition 'use their bike' is okay but better to use pronoun 'them' to avoid repetition and ensure correct reference (Grammar problem type ID 12/13). Suggested improvements: match singular/plural consistently, add commas for readability, and use appropriate pronouns for clarity.