Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and grammatically incorrect. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question (e.g., "No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child."). Then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words (e.g., reasons, a short memory, or who borrowed a bike). Keep it natural, concise (max 4–5 sentences), and avoid fragmented phrases.

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. Instead, I often borrowed my friend's bike because my family couldn't afford one. For example, my friend and I would ride to the park every weekend, and I learned to balance and pedal by watching him.

提案: Your response is too short, incoherent and doesn't explain the reason. Begin with a clear opinion (e.g., "I don't think bikes are very popular in my country."). Then provide specific reasons or examples using linking words (e.g., "because", "for example", "however"). Aim for 2–4 sentences that show reasons, comparisons or a brief prediction.

例: I don't think bikes are very popular in my country because most people prefer cars or public transport. For example, the cities are crowded and there are few safe bike lanes, so many parents discourage children from cycling. However, cycling is becoming more common in some areas where new bike lanes have been built.

× No, I bought my friend.

✓ No, I borrowed my friend's bike.

The student's original reply 'I bought my friend' is grammatically incorrect and does not answer the examiner's question. The question asks whether the student had a bike as a child (possession), so an appropriate response would indicate owning or borrowing a bike. 'Bought my friend' is wrong because 'buy' requires an object being bought (a thing), not a person. Likely intended meanings are 'I bought one from my friend' or 'I borrowed my friend's bike.' I corrected it to 'I borrowed my friend's bike' because it fits a plausible childhood situation and uses correct verb and possessive structure. Suggestion: decide whether you meant past ownership ('I had a bike' or 'I bought one from a friend') or temporary use ('I borrowed my friend's bike'), and use the correct verb and object, including the possessive form with 'friend's'.

× No, because mum. No, no, no.

✓ No, not really. My mum didn't like us riding bikes when I was young.

The original response 'No, because mum. No, no, no.' is ungrammatical and unclear. It lacks verb structure and does not explain why bikes are not popular. I corrected it to a complete sentence that explains a plausible reason: 'My mum didn't like us riding bikes when I was young.' This uses a negative past tense to match the examiner's question about general popularity and provides a clear subject, verb, and object. Suggestion: when giving reasons, form a full clause with subject and verb (for example, 'My mother discouraged riding bikes' or 'My mum didn't allow us to ride bikes'), and avoid fragmented replies.