Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (use plural/singular appropriately), remove redundancy, and add one specific supporting detail. Use linking words for coherence (e.g., “because,” “so,” “for example”). Keep to no more than 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. My father loved cycling, so he bought one for me and one for my brother. As a result, we used to ride together on weekends around our neighborhood, which was a fun way to spend time as a family.

提案: Improve accuracy and naturalness: use correct articles and references (e.g., “my country” not “that country”), make sentences more fluent, and expand one specific example or reason. Use linking words (e.g., “because,” “for example,” “also”) and avoid vague phrasing.

例: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in my country. For example, many cities have well-developed bike lanes, so riding is convenient and safe. Also, some people choose bikes over public transport for short trips because it is cheaper and faster in busy areas.

× I had the bike when I was a child.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child.

The noun 'bike' should be indefinite because the speaker is referring to any bike they owned in childhood, not a specific bike previously mentioned. Use 'a' with singular countable nouns when not specific. Suggestion: Use 'a bike' for non-specific singular items.

× My dad loved riding a bicycle so much and so he bought me and my brother a bike and we all we used to ride the bike in weekends.

✓ My dad loved riding a bicycle so much, so he bought my brother and me bikes and we used to ride them on weekends.

Multiple issues fall under third person and related agreement: 'bought me and my brother a bike' is awkward ordering and number — if he bought one each, use 'bikes'; pronoun order should be 'my brother and me'. 'We all we used' has an extra 'we'; remove repetition. Use plural pronouns 'them' to refer back to 'bikes'. Preposition and article: say 'on weekends' not 'in weekends'. Suggestion: Ensure subject-verb clarity and correct pronoun order; match singular/plural consistently.

× Well, I think bike is quite popular in that country.

✓ Well, I think bikes are quite popular in that country.

Countable noun 'bike' used generally requires plural 'bikes' and appropriate verb agreement 'are' when speaking about popularity in general. Alternatively 'a bike is' would refer to a single bike, which is not intended. Suggestion: Use plural for general statements about a category: 'bikes are'.

× First of all, the city is quite well developed, so there are many bike lanes.

✓ First of all, the city is quite well developed, so there are many bike lanes.

This sentence is grammatically correct. Tense and agreement are appropriate for a present-state description. No correction needed. Suggestion: None.

× Moreover, some people prefer to ride a bike to replace some public transport.

✓ Moreover, some people prefer to ride a bike instead of using public transport.

The verb 'prefer' followed by 'to' plus verb is possible, but 'to replace some public transport' is awkward and incorrect preposition/structure. Use 'instead of' to indicate substitution and 'using' to show the action of taking public transport. Also 'some public transport' is vague; 'public transport' (uncountable) is sufficient. Suggestion: Use 'prefer to X instead of Y' or 'prefer X to Y' with correct verb forms: 'prefer to ride a bike instead of using public transport.'