Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and use correct past tense and article use. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two supporting details linked logically. Avoid repetition. For example, say you didn’t have a bike, explain why, and add a specific detail about how you usually traveled. Use linking words such as "because" and "so" appropriately and correct verb forms (had, picked).

例: I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because my family usually drove me everywhere. For example, my father often picked me up by motorcycle or car, so I never needed to learn to cycle regularly.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence, then explain specific reasons with accurate vocabulary. Use linking words (for example, because, for instance, in addition) and correct terms like "transportation system" and "EasyCard." Be specific about who uses the bikes and where they are available. Avoid vague phrasing and repeat words less.

例: Yes, bicycles are very popular in Taiwan because our public transportation system supports bike-sharing. For example, people can rent bikes with an EasyCard at many stations and ride them to the next metro stop, which makes short trips very convenient.

× I don't have bike when I was a child because I don't I don't need it.

✓ I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I didn't need one.

The sentence mixes present tense 'don't have' with past time 'when I was a child'. Use past tense 'didn't have' for events in the past. Also 'bike' needs the article 'a' and 'need it' is awkward; use 'need one' to refer back to 'a bike'. Suggestion: keep past tense consistently and include the correct article.

× My father will pick me up by vehicle or motorcycle.

✓ My father would pick me up in a car or on a motorcycle.

The original uses future 'will pick' but the context is past habitual action. Use past habitual 'would pick' or 'used to pick'. Also 'by vehicle' is unnatural; use 'in a car' or 'on a motorcycle'. Prepositions: 'in' for car, 'on' for motorcycle.

× So I don't have bike when I was a child.

✓ So I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

Again tense mismatch: 'don't have' (present) conflicts with 'when I was a child' (past). Use past 'didn't have' and include the article 'a' before 'bike'.

× Yes, bicycles are popular in my country because in Taiwan we will use a transportation code.

✓ Yes, bicycles are popular in my country because in Taiwan we use a transportation card.

'Will use' implies future; use simple present 'use' for general facts. 'Transportation code' is incorrect word choice; the intended word is 'transportation card'. Replace 'will' with 'use' and 'code' with 'card'.

× You bike and you can rent the bicycle by your easy card and you can ride a bicycle to the next station.

✓ You can rent a bicycle with your EasyCard and ride it to the next station.

Clarify modal structure: 'You bike' is incorrect; use 'You can rent'. 'by your easy card' should be 'with your EasyCard' (preposition and proper noun capitalization). Avoid repeating 'you can' twice; combine actions and use pronoun 'it' to refer to the bicycle. Use simple present for general capability.