Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 문장 구조를 더 명확히 하고 불필요한 반복과 망설임(umm)을 줄이세요. 예를 들어, 과거와 현재 상태를 구분해 한두 문장으로 간결하게 말하고, 시간 표현은 자연스럽게 정리하세요. 또한 'I haven't now actually' 처럼 어색한 표현 대신 'I don't have one now'처럼 정확한 시제를 사용하세요.

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I never learned to ride one. I learned to ride about a year ago, but I don't own a bike at the moment.

提案: 중복 표현(‘trendy like a trend’, 여러 번의 'umm')을 줄이고 이유를 구체적으로 제시하세요. 연결어를 사용해 이유와 예를 자연스럽게 이어주고, 문장 끝은 분명하게 마무리하세요. 예를 들어 공공자전거 시스템의 장점이나 이용 상황을 간단히 덧붙이세요.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. For example, the government introduced a public bike system, which makes cycling convenient and affordable, so many people use bikes for short trips in the city.

× No, I didn't have a bike when I was little, umm, because I didn't know how to ride a bike before then.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was little because I didn't know how to ride one then.

The sentence is generally correct but redundant phrasing 'before then' is awkward. Use 'then' for past reference and replace 'a bike' with pronoun 'one' to avoid repetition. Maintain past tense consistency.

× But now I, I've just learned how to ride a bike like umm, a year ago.

✓ But I learned how to ride a bike about a year ago.

The original mixes present perfect 'I've just learned' with a specific past time 'a year ago', which is incorrect. Use simple past 'learned' with a definite past time expression. Also use 'about' instead of 'like' for more natural phrasing.

× So I haven't now actually.

✓ So I don't have one now, actually.

The original 'I haven't now actually' is ungrammatical because 'have' here is not an auxiliary; we need the full verb phrase 'have one' and use present simple negative 'do not have'. Also place 'actually' at the end for natural word order.

× I mean it's even like a trendy like a trend in my country because we have umm public bike system, umm, made by the government.

✓ I mean it's even a trend in my country because we have a public bike system made by the government.

Remove redundant words 'like' and 'trendy like a trend'. Use the indefinite article 'a' before 'public bike system'. 'Public bike system' is countable and needs an article. The phrase 'made by the government' is fine after the noun.

× So yeah, I think it's really trendy not.

✓ So yeah, I think it's not really trendy.

The original 'really trendy not' places negation incorrectly. English requires 'not' after the verb phrase or before the adjective with 'not really'. Use 'not really trendy' to express that it is not very trendy, or 'really trendy' to express the opposite depending on intended meaning.