Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and use past tense consistently. Also correct prepositions and plural/singular forms.

例: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. I often rode it in the park near my house with my friends and sometimes with my neighbor, which helped me feel independent and confident. For example, we would race each other on weekends and explore the nearby streets.

提案: Give a direct opinion sentence, then support it with a specific reason and a contrasting point using linking words. Fix grammar (use articles, plural forms, and correct verb forms) and avoid vague phrasing like 'most of people recently'.

例: Yes, bicycles are still popular, especially in smaller towns and among students. However, in recent years more people have started using buses or private cars because cities have improved public transport and incomes have risen, so bike use has declined in urban areas.

× I used to have a bike when I was a child and I really really like to play along the park near my house and sometimes I go there with my friends with my neighbor as well.

✓ I used to have a bike when I was a child, and I really liked to play in the park near my house; sometimes I went there with my friends and with my neighbor as well.

Multiple issues: 1) Present vs past tense (Grammar problem type 6 and 5): The student begins with 'I used to have' (past habit), so follow-up verbs describing that past habit should be past tense. Change 'like' to 'liked' and 'go' to 'went'. 2) Preposition error (Grammar problem type 11): 'play along the park' is incorrect; use 'play in the park' for location. 3) Sentence structure/coordination (Grammar problem type 26): The original is a run-on. Add punctuation and coordinate phrases clearly: use a comma and semicolon or separate sentences. 4) Incorrect conjunction/parallelism (Grammar problem type 16): 'with my friends with my neighbor as well' is awkward; change to 'with my friends and with my neighbor as well' or 'with my friends and my neighbor.' Suggestion: Keep past tense consistent when describing past habits, use correct prepositions for locations, and join ideas with appropriate conjunctions or punctuation.

× Yes, of course bike is one of the popular transportation in my country, but most of people recently using other public transportation or their own car to travel from.

✓ Yes, of course the bike is one of the popular means of transportation in my country, but most people recently use other public transportation or their own cars to travel.

Multiple issues: 1) Article error (Grammar problem type 17 and 22): 'bike' needs the definite article 'the' when referring to the category; alternatively use plural 'bikes'. 2) Word choice/number (Grammar problem type 1): 'transportation' is uncountable; use 'means of transportation' or 'modes of transport'. 3) Subject-verb agreement and verb tense/form (Grammar problem type 27 and 6): 'most of people recently using' is incorrect. Use 'most people recently use' (present simple) to describe a current trend. 4) Plural consistency (Grammar problem type 1): 'their own car' should be 'their own cars' to match 'most people'. 5) Unnecessary word 'from' at the end (Grammar problem type 26): Remove 'from'. Suggestion: Use 'the bike' or 'bikes' with correct articles, use 'means of transportation' for clarity, ensure subject and verb agree and choose appropriate present tense for current trends, and keep nouns plural when referring to many people.