Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammatical accuracy, sentence structure and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence, use past tense consistently, avoid repetition, and add one concise supporting detail. Use linking words (e.g., “when,” “so,” “and”) to connect ideas. Keep the answer to no more than 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I did. When I was 12 my parents bought me a new bicycle, and they taught me how to ride it because they thought it was an essential skill. I remember practicing in the park near our house until I felt confident.

提案: Make the response more natural and specific. Start with a direct statement, use correct subject-verb agreement, avoid filler words, and give one specific example of where people commonly use bikes. Use a linking word like “for example” to introduce the detail.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient. For example, many students and shoppers cycle short distances to school and local markets to avoid traffic and save money.

× Yes, I have the back when I was child I remember when I was 12 years old my parents buy a new bicycle for me and they also tell me tell me how to ride the bikes because it is it be considered basic skills in.

✓ Yes, I had one when I was a child. I remember when I was 12 years old my parents bought a new bicycle for me, and they also taught me how to ride it because it was considered a basic skill.

This sentence contains multiple issues that fit 'Sentence structure errors' (ID 26) and some tense and agreement problems (IDs 5 and 27). Corrections made: changed present 'have' to past 'had' to match 'when I was a child'; added the article 'a' before 'child'; split the run-on into two sentences for clarity; changed 'buy' to past 'bought' and 'tell me tell me how to ride the bikes' to 'taught me how to ride it' to use the correct past tense and avoid repetition; changed 'bikes' to 'it' to refer to the single bicycle and fixed 'it is it be considered basic skills in' to 'it was considered a basic skill' to correct tense, number (skill singular) and remove extra words. Suggestion: keep tense consistent (past) for past events, use articles where needed, avoid run-on sentences by using punctuation, and ensure pronouns agree with their antecedents.

× Yes, bike are always very, very popular in our country because it's very convenient and cheaper for us to the near place like school, uh, supermarkets and so on.

✓ Yes, bikes are always very popular in our country because they are very convenient and cheaper for us to travel to nearby places like school, supermarkets, and so on.

This sentence has subject-verb agreement and related issues (ID 27) and incorrect use of articles/prepositions (ID 11/22). Corrected 'bike are' to plural 'bikes are'; replaced 'it's' with 'they are' to agree with plural subject; changed 'to the near place' to 'to nearby places' for correct preposition and adjective use; replaced 'cheaper for us to the near place' with 'cheaper for us to travel to nearby places' to add the missing verb and clarify meaning. Suggestion: ensure subjects and verbs agree in number, match pronouns to their antecedents, and include necessary verbs and correct prepositions for natural phrasing.