Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a direct clear answer, then add one or two supporting details (brief reason or memory). Avoid filler sounds like “umm” and expand to at least two sentences using a linking phrase (e.g., “actually” or “because”). Keep total length under five sentences.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. Actually, my family lived in a small apartment so there wasn’t much space to keep one, and we usually walked or took public transport instead.

提案: Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give specific supporting details and use linking words for coherence. Reduce repetitions and fillers, and include a concrete example or brief statistic if possible. Keep it concise (2–4 sentences).

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many people live in rural villages where cars are too expensive. For example, in those areas people use bikes to travel to markets and schools every day, so bicycles are an essential and affordable mode of transport.

× Umm, not really. Umm.

✓ Umm, not really.

This utterance is acceptable as a short answer; no structural change needed. It contains filler words but no grammatical error.

× Yeah, I think my in my country specifically, bikes are very popular because, umm, we have so much villages in our country, in our country where people really find it hard to, uh, buy a car.

✓ Yeah, I think in my country specifically, bikes are very popular because we have so many villages where people really find it hard to buy a car.

Errors: incorrect word order ('my in my country'), wrong quantifier ('so much villages' should be 'so many villages'), and redundant phrase repetition. Use 'so many' with countable nouns (villages). Remove repeated 'in our country' and filler pauses for clarity. Maintain present tense 'have' and 'find' to match general statement.

× So I think there are many people who depend on bike.

✓ So I think there are many people who depend on bikes.

Error: singular/plural mismatch. The noun 'bike' should be plural ('bikes') after 'depend on' when referring to people using bicycles in general. Use plural to indicate general habit or means of transport.