Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Grammar and fluency: use correct past tense ("I did have" or simply "I had") and avoid filler words like "uh". Structure: start with a clear topic sentence, then add 1–2 specific supporting details (where, who bought it, what you did). Keep it concise (max 4–5 sentences). Coherence: reduce repetition and correct phrasing (e.g., "I fell" instead of "I have felt"). Vocabulary: use varied but relevant words (e.g., "backyard" vs "garden", "enjoyed" instead of repeating "have fun").

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My grandmother bought it for me, and I rode it every day in my aunt’s large backyard. I enjoyed practicing tricks and sometimes I fell, but that didn’t stop me from riding.

提案: Content and clarity: answer directly and expand with one or two specific examples using linking words. Avoid repetition ("they make race, they race"). Grammar: use natural phrasing ("there is an annual bike marathon" or "they hold a bike race every year"). Add brief reasons or consequences to enrich the answer (e.g., popularity for health, transport, or sport).

例: Absolutely. Bicycles are very popular; there is an annual bike marathon that attracts thousands of participants each year. Many people also use bikes for daily commutes because they are affordable and good exercise.

× Yes, I did had a bike, uh, back in my days in childhood, my grandma had bought for me a beautiful bike where I used to play in my auntie's uh, backyard because it is large. I used to have fun and enjoy it so much, uh, even though I have uh, felt, I have felt.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My grandma bought me a beautiful bike, and I used to play with it in my auntie's large backyard. I had a lot of fun and enjoyed it very much.

Multiple past-tense errors: 'did had' is incorrect because 'did' already marks the past; use simple past 'had' (Past tense issue). 'had bought for me' is awkward; use simple past 'bought me' (Past tense issue). 'where I used to play' is acceptable but 'with it' clarifies the object (Sentence structure). 'because it is large' mixes present tense; change to past or rephrase as 'large backyard'. The repeated 'I have felt' is incorrect and unnecessary — it mixes present perfect where simple past 'I felt' or omission is better. Suggestions: remove auxiliary 'did' before past verb, use simple past consistently for past events, avoid redundant phrases, and keep tense consistent within the narrative.

× In my country we have a marathon for bikes and every single year they make race, they race.

✓ In my country we have a bike marathon, and every year they hold a race.

Errors: 'make race' is ungrammatical; use verbs like 'hold' or 'organize' plus 'a race' (Verb in the present participle form / Sentence structure). Repetition 'they race' is redundant. Also 'marathon for bikes' is awkward; 'bike marathon' or 'bicycle marathon' is more natural. Suggestions: use correct collocations such as 'hold a race' or 'organize a race', avoid redundant repetition, and use natural noun phrases like 'bike marathon'.