Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Correct the grammar (use past tense consistently), give a clear topic sentence, add one or two specific supporting details, and avoid redundancy. Use a linking word if adding details. Keep the answer within 3–4 short sentences. For example, start with “Yes, I had a bike” then mention when or what type and a brief memory.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small red bicycle with training wheels, and I learned to ride it in our neighborhood when I was seven. Because I practiced every afternoon, I became quite confident and stopped using the training wheels within a few months.

提案: Use correct subject-verb agreement and more precise phrasing. Begin with a clear opinion sentence, then add specific reasons and an example using a linking word (e.g., “because” or “for example”). Limit to 2–3 sentences. Mention who uses bikes and why to make it more specific.

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because many children and adults use them for short trips and exercise. For example, in my neighborhood nearly every child owns a bicycle, and parents often ride bikes to the market or park on weekends.

× Yeah, I have a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yeah, I had a bike when I was a child.

The sentence mixes present tense 'have' with a past time reference 'when I was a child'. Use past tense 'had' to match the past time. Suggestion: use past tense for verbs when referring to past events (I had a bike).

× Yeah, I think so, because every child have a bike in my country and it's a very popular.

✓ Yeah, I think so, because every child has a bike in my country and it's very popular.

The subject 'every child' is singular, so the verb should be 'has' (third person singular). Also 'it's a very popular' is ungrammatical because 'popular' is an adjective that needs a noun or should be used predicatively without 'a'. Here 'it's very popular' (no 'a') is correct. Suggestion: match verb form to singular subject and remove the unnecessary article before 'very popular'.