Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer direct, natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No), then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammatical errors and avoid irrelevant phrases like “regarding FACT.” Also keep to under five sentences and use appropriate age reference (e.g. "one or two years old").

例: Yes, I did have a bike when I was a child. I remember seeing a photo of myself on a small bicycle when I was about one or two years old, even though I could barely walk. That memory makes me smile because my family encouraged outdoor play.

提案: Answer directly and organize ideas with linking words (however, for example). Use accurate place names (Rio de Janeiro) and correct grammar (e.g. "there are plenty of people"). Give one clear opinion, then a specific example or contrast to support it. Keep sentences concise and avoid filler phrases like “to be honest.”

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my city. For example, many people use bicycles for short trips and there are bike lanes downtown; however, I have noticed that other cities, such as Rio de Janeiro, have fewer bike riders in some neighborhoods.

× I've never thought about it, but I remember to see a picture of myself riding a bicycle when I was really little.

✓ I've never really thought about it, but I remember seeing a picture of myself riding a bicycle when I was really little.

The verb 'remember' is followed by a gerund when referring to a past memory of seeing something (remember + -ing). Using 'to see' is incorrect here. Use 'remember seeing' to indicate a memory; also adding 'really' after 'never' improves naturalness.

× I was probably around 1 year old or two.

✓ I was probably around one or two years old.

Number expression and word order are incorrect. Use 'one or two years old' rather than '1 year old or two.' Also write numbers as words in speech and place 'years' after the numbers.

× I couldn't even walk properly, but I remember to.

✓ I couldn't even walk properly, but I remember it.

'Remember' in this context should be followed by an object (it) or a gerund if referring to an action. The fragment 'remember to' is incomplete. The intended meaning is recalling that fact, so 'I remember it' is appropriate; if recalling an action, use 'I remember doing it.'

× To be honest I never really thought about that, but I believe in here, which is really common city in Brazil, there is plenty people riding bicycles on the street, but I've never seen in other cities like Rio Janeiro have this type of bicycle ridings.

✓ To be honest, I never really thought about that, but I believe that here, which is a very common city in Brazil, there are plenty of people riding bicycles on the streets, but I've never seen other cities like Rio de Janeiro have this kind of bicycle riding.

Multiple preposition and article errors: use commas for clauses; 'believe that' is more natural than 'believe in here.' Use 'a very common city' for description. Use 'there are' with plural 'people' (existence construction). 'Plenty people' should be 'plenty of people.' 'On the street' -> 'on the streets' for general observation. 'I've never seen in other cities like Rio Janeiro have' is ungrammatical — rephrase to 'I've never seen other cities like Rio de Janeiro have.' Also use correct place name 'Rio de Janeiro' and 'this kind of bicycle riding' instead of 'bicycle ridings.'