Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a direct topic sentence, correct grammar, and avoid filler words. Keep answer within 2–4 clear sentences: state whether you had a bike, describe it briefly, and explain its effect with specific detail. Use correct tense and natural phrasing; remove unnecessary tags like “right?” and unnecessary adjectives like “late.”

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents bought me a small bicycle with training wheels, and I used it every weekend in the park. Learning to ride boosted my confidence and helped me improve my balance, which made me more independent.

提案: Answer directly, correct grammar, and provide specific supporting detail with linking words. Start with a clear opinion, then give reasons and examples (e.g., commuting, cost, infrastructure). Fix subject-verb agreement and awkward phrases. Keep to 2–4 sentences and use appropriate connectors like “because” or “for example.”

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in Korea because they are cheap and convenient. For example, many students and workers ride bicycles to school or the subway station, and several cities have bike lanes and rental schemes that make cycling easy.

× Excited to have a bike when I was a child.

✓ I was excited to have a bike when I was a child.

The original is a sentence fragment lacking a finite verb and subject; this is a sentence structure error. Begin with the subject 'I' and include the past tense verb 'was' to form a complete clause. Suggestion: always include subject + verb (I was excited).

× It was a late bicycle with training wheels that's my parents bought for me and it really boosted my confidence and helped me develop my balance as I launched right?

✓ It was a little bicycle with training wheels that my parents bought for me, and it really boosted my confidence and helped me develop my balance when I learned to ride, right?

Multiple issues: 'late' is incorrect word choice (should be 'little') which is an adjective error but within list best matched to article/adjective use; 'that's' is a contraction used incorrectly for a relative clause — use 'that'. The clause needs proper punctuation and a correct time clause: 'when I learned to ride' instead of 'as I launched'. Also add a comma before 'and'. Suggestions: choose correct adjective ('little'), use 'that' for defining relative clauses, replace informal/incorrect verbs with standard phrase 'learned to ride'.

× Is most people in Korea is used bicycle is when they commute to Oracle school.

✓ Most people in Korea use bicycles when they commute to school.

Original has subject-verb agreement and auxiliary errors: 'Is most people' is ungrammatical; 'is used bicycle is' mixes tenses and structure. Correct subject 'Most people' with plural verb 'use' and plural noun 'bicycles'. Remove extraneous words like 'is' and 'Oracle' which seems incorrect in context. Suggestion: keep subject and verb in agreement and use simple present for habitual actions.

× It is very cheap and effective way to move around everywhere.

✓ It is a very cheap and effective way to get around everywhere.

Missing indefinite article before 'very': should be 'a very cheap... way'. Also 'move around' is acceptable but 'get around' is more natural for travel; keep article use consistent. Suggestion: include 'a' before 'very' when modifying a singular countable noun ('way').