Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., “No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child.”). Then briefly give a specific reason and one supporting detail using linking words (e.g., “because…”, “so…”). Keep responses concise (no more than 4–5 sentences). Avoid incorrect tense and word forms such as “hadn't want” or “haven't request.”

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. I think it was because my family couldn’t afford one at the time, so I mostly walked to school. As a result, I didn’t learn to ride until I was a teenager.

提案: Organize the answer with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to contrast past and present. Correct grammar (use plural/singular consistently) and choose precise vocabulary (“afford,” “public transport,” “bicycle lanes”). Keep it within 4–5 sentences and add one specific example or fact to support your point.

例: Bicycles were not very common when I was growing up because many families couldn’t afford them, so people mostly walked or used public transport. However, nowadays bikes are becoming more popular as prices fall and cities add more dedicated cycling lanes. For example, my city added three new bike lanes last year, which has made cycling safer and more attractive.

× No, I hadn't want and I don't know the reason why but I haven't request one from my parents maybe.

✓ No, I didn't want one and I don't know the reason why, but I didn't ask my parents for one, maybe.

Errors: 'hadn't want' uses wrong auxiliary and verb form; use simple past negative 'didn't want'. 'haven't request' uses present perfect with base verb 'request' incorrectly and wrong auxiliary; the correct past form is 'didn't ask'. Also 'ask my parents for one' is the natural collocation. Suggestion: Use simple past for past habits or events ('didn't want', 'didn't ask') and use correct verb forms and collocations ('ask for').

× Actually in my place when I was born and raised bicycle wasn't very common at the time many families care couldn't afford to buy 1 so most of the people relied on walking or transport. Public uh.

✓ Actually, where I was born and raised, bicycles weren't very common at the time; many families couldn't afford to buy one, so most people relied on walking or public transport.

Errors: Missing plural 'bicycle' should be 'bicycles' or 'a bicycle' with article; subject-verb agreement 'bicycle wasn't' with singular is awkward—use plural 'bicycles weren't'. Run-on sentence and awkward word order: 'in my place when I was born and raised' should be 'where I was born and raised'. 'many families care' is incorrect word; remove 'care'. 'buy 1' should be 'buy one'. 'Public uh' should be 'public transport' and placed together. Suggestions: Use commas to separate clauses, use plural nouns when speaking generally ('bicycles'), use correct vocabulary ('public transport'), and keep sentence structure clear.