Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Good direct response and relevant supporting details. To improve, make the answer slightly more concise and use one linking phrase to connect ideas; add a specific detail (e.g., where you rode or how old you were) to make it more vivid. Keep to under five sentences and avoid small redundancies like “so much” after “loved.”

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was about seven and rode it around my neighborhood every day. Because I practiced often, I became faster and more confident, and other children thought I was a bit crazy for cycling so often.

提案: The answer addresses the question but has repetition (“because” twice, repeated “a”) and could be more specific. Improve coherence by using one clear topic sentence, then add a specific example or brief comparison (e.g., city commuting vs. rural areas). Use linking words like ‘however’ or ‘for example’ to organize the points and avoid repetition. Keep sentences shorter and within five sentences.

例: I don't think bikes are very popular in my country nowadays. For example, in cities many people prefer trains or trams because they are more comfortable and much faster for commuting, whereas bikes are more common only in parks or for short trips.

× No, I don't think so, because nowadays a a variety of people prefer other models of transport such as trains, trams or planes because they're more comfortable and convenient and much faster for commuting longer distances.

✓ No, I don't think so, because nowadays a variety of people prefer other modes of transport such as trains, trams, or planes because they're more comfortable, more convenient, and much faster for commuting longer distances.

The original sentence contains an article error ('a a variety') and a word choice issue: 'models of transport' is unusual; 'modes of transport' is standard. Also parallelism and punctuation improvements help clarity. Remove the duplicated 'a' (article error) and change 'models' to 'modes' to use the correct noun collocation. Insert a serial comma and add 'more' before 'convenient' to maintain parallel comparative structure with 'more comfortable' and 'much faster'.