Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Good direct answer with a clear topic sentence and specific detail (small red bike with training wheels). To improve, make the response slightly more natural and varied: avoid repeating pronouns, add a linking phrase to explain why it was memorable or how often you rode it, and keep the answer concise (1–3 sentences). Also correct minor phrasing to sound more fluent (e.g., "I used to ride it every afternoon" instead of adding extra location words).

例: Yes — I did. I had a small red bike with training wheels, and I used to ride it every afternoon around the neighborhood because it felt liberating and helped me make friends.

提案: The topic sentence answers directly, but supporting details contain errors and unclear vocabulary ("writing bags" is incorrect). To improve: use accurate, relevant vocabulary and add a linking phrase to make the example clearer. Provide one or two specific observations (e.g., lots of children riding bikes, people cycling to work) and a brief reason for popularity. Keep to 2–3 coherent sentences.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. For example, in my apartment complex many young children ride bicycles in the courtyard, and many adults cycle to work because it is cheap and convenient.

× Yes, bikes are really popular in my country. For example, I live in an apartment with young families and I see a lot of kids writing bags during the day.

✓ Yes, bikes are really popular in my country. For example, I live in an apartment complex with many young families and I see a lot of kids riding bikes during the day.

The sentence contains incorrect word choice and a collocation error. 'Apartment' alone is acceptable, but 'apartment complex' is a more natural collocation when referring to a building or group of buildings with many families. 'A lot of kids writing bags' is incorrect: 'writing' is the wrong verb and likely a typo for 'riding', and 'bags' is the wrong noun; the context is about bicycles, so 'riding bikes' is correct. Suggestion: use 'riding bikes' to convey children using bicycles, and 'apartment complex' or 'apartment building' when describing many families living in the same property.