Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Reduce repetition and organize your answer into a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, “then,” “after that,” or “finally”). Be specific about what you mean by “learned” and the event of showing friends (e.g., rode well, performed a trick). Keep it to 2–4 sentences and avoid filler sounds (“uh,” repeated “I”).

例: Yes. I had a bike when I was a child, and my mother taught me how to ride. It took me a few weeks to feel confident, and then I remember showing my friends how I could ride without training wheels.

提案: Start with a direct opinion sentence (e.g., “Yes, they are still popular” or “They used to be more popular”). Use clearer time references and avoid filler words. Provide a concise reason and, if possible, a brief comparison to today using linking words like “however” or “nowadays.” Be specific about how popularity has changed (fewer bikes now, more motor vehicles).

例: They were very popular in the 1950s and 60s because bicycles were one of the main ways to get around. However, nowadays more people use cars and motorcycles, so bikes are less common in cities, although they remain popular for recreation and exercise.

× I, I learned it from my mother and as I can remember, I, I learned it for a few, a few weeks, but finally it was the time when I showed my my friends how to write on it.

✓ I learned from my mother, and as I remember, I learned for a few weeks, but finally it was time when I showed my friends how to ride it.

Errors: unnecessary filler words and repetition, incorrect verb choice 'write' for riding, awkward phrase 'as I can remember' (use 'as I remember'), and redundant 'my my'. Suggestions: remove repeated fillers, use past tense consistently ('learned'), use correct verb 'ride' for bicycles, and simplify phrases (e.g., 'it was time when'). Grammar problem type ID:5

× Yeah. I would say it used to be quite popular because I think back to the 1950s or 60s, we don't have uh, so much uh, motorbikes or motors on the road.

✓ Yeah. I would say it used to be quite popular because when I think back to the 1950s or 60s, we didn't have so many motorbikes or motors on the road.

Errors: tense inconsistency and incorrect quantifier. 'I think back to' should be 'when I think back to' or 'when I look back', and referring to the past requires past tense 'didn't have' not present 'don't have'. Also use 'so many' (countable plural) instead of 'so much'. Suggestions: maintain past tense when describing past conditions and use correct quantifier for countable nouns. Grammar problem type ID:6

× The only transportation we can rely on is uh, bikes.

✓ The only transportation we could rely on was bikes.

Errors: mismatch of modality and tense. The speaker refers to the past ('1950s or 60s') so 'can rely on' should be changed to past modal 'could rely on', and 'is' should be 'was' to match past timeframe. Suggestions: align verb tense and modal verbs with the time reference in the sentence. Grammar problem type ID:26

× So I think back to that time.

✓ So I think back to that time.

No grammatical change necessary; sentence is acceptable but could be improved to 'So I think back to those times' or 'So I remember that time' for clarity. This item identifies a borderline pronoun/number choice: 'that time' vs 'those times'. Suggestions: use 'those times' when referring to a period rather than a single moment. Grammar problem type ID:12