Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it can be improved by starting with a concise topic sentence, adding one brief supporting detail and using a linking word for coherence. Also avoid repeating words (e.g., "bike").

例: No, I didn’t. When I was a child I didn’t own one because I never learned to ride. However, I often borrowed my friend’s bicycle to play in the park, so I still enjoyed being outdoors.

提案: Good idea and relevant points, but the response is slightly disorganized with fillers and repetition. Improve by using a clear topic sentence, removing fillers, using linking words (e.g., "because", "so"), and giving one or two specific examples or statistics to support your claim.

例: Yes, bicycles are becoming quite popular in Hong Kong. Because of heavy traffic and expensive public transport, many people use bikes or e-bikes to commute, so they can save time and money; for example, some students cycle to university instead of taking the bus.

× No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I didn't know how to ride a bike.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I didn't know how to ride one.

Repetition of 'bike' is stylistically awkward rather than a strict grammar error; however, using 'one' (a pronoun) avoids redundancy. The tense is correct (past simple) because the speaker refers to a past state and ability. Suggestion: replace repeated nouns with appropriate pronouns to improve fluency. ID:5

× Yeah, I would say yes, It's quite popular in Hong Kong of like riding a bike, umm, because people can avoid the traffic and then they can go to school or work easier and faster and also they can save their money.

✓ Yes, I would say so. It's quite popular in Hong Kong to ride a bike because people can avoid traffic, get to school or work more easily and quickly, and save money.

Multiple issues here match the provided list; selected primary problem is incorrect use of the definite article and related phrasing. 'The traffic' is not necessary; 'traffic' as an uncountable noun is more natural without 'the' in this general statement. 'Of like riding a bike' is ungrammatical and should be 'to ride a bike' (infinitive after 'popular'). 'Go to school or work easier and faster' has adjective/adverb errors: use adverbs 'more easily and more quickly' or 'easily and quickly'. 'Save their money' is unnatural — 'save money' is the correct general expression. Suggestions: use 'to' + base verb after 'popular' (or 'popular to do something'), remove unnecessary articles with uncountable nouns, use adverbs for manner, and omit possessive when making general statements about saving money. ID:17