Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid tense errors and unnecessary filler (e.g., “OK, so basically”, “yeah”). Use correct past tense and clearer pronouns. For example, say you didn’t have a bike, explain why briefly, and mention the brother’s bike and how often you rode it.

例: I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. Instead, I preferred toys like dolls, so my parents never bought me one. However, my brother had a bike, and I sometimes borrowed it to ride around the neighborhood with him.

提案: Give a clear main idea, then support it with specific, well-linked details. Correct grammar (articles, plurals, word order) and use varied vocabulary (e.g., “motorbikes,” “popular among young people,” “many brands”). Keep it within 3–4 sentences and use linking words such as “because,” “for example,” or “also.”

例: Yes, motorbikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient. For example, many young people prefer powerful models like the Bullet for style and speed. Also, there are many brands and types available, so riders can choose according to their budget and taste.

× OK, so basically I do not have any.

✓ OK, so basically I did not have one.

The question asks about the past (when you were a child), so present tense 'do not have' is incorrect. Use past simple 'did not have'. Also 'any' is vague; 'one' or 'a bike' is clearer when referring to a singular countable noun. Suggestion: Use past tense for past situations and match countable nouns with 'a' or 'one'.

× I was not having any bike when I was child because as I'm a girl so I was fond of toys like dolls and other girly things.

✓ I did not have a bike when I was a child because, as I was a girl, I was fond of toys like dolls and other girly things.

The continuous past 'was not having' is inappropriate for possession; use simple past 'did not have'. Also 'when I was child' needs the article 'a child'. 'As I'm a girl' mixes present with past—use 'as I was a girl' or better omit and say 'because I was a girl'. Suggestion: Use simple past for past possession and include articles ('a child', 'a bike'). Keep tense consistent.

× So I do not have any bike but my brother was having one bike and I like to ride those also.

✓ So I did not have a bike, but my brother had one and I liked to ride it sometimes.

Pronoun and tense problems: 'do not have' should be past 'did not have' to match context. 'Was having one bike' is awkward; use simple past 'had one'. 'Those' is plural and doesn't match 'one bike'—use 'it'. Also 'I like to ride' should be past 'I liked to ride' to maintain past narration. Suggestion: Keep pronouns consistent with their antecedents and maintain past tense throughout the childhood story.

× Yeah.

✓ Yes.

This is not a grammar error per se, but 'Yeah' is informal; 'Yes' is more appropriate in a test context. No tense change required. Suggestion: Use formal affirmative responses in test settings.

× Yes, in my country bikes are quite popular as there are lot of varieties of bikes a different companies and most of the people like bullet type bikes which are more preferable to the younger ones and they younger ones feel energetic while using those bikes.

✓ Yes, in my country bikes are quite popular because there are a lot of varieties from different companies, and many people like bullet-style bikes, which are more popular with younger people because they feel energetic when using them.

Multiple issues: missing article 'a lot', incorrect phrase 'a different companies' should be 'from different companies', awkward comparative 'more preferable to the younger ones' should be 'more popular with younger people' or 'preferred by younger people'. Repetition 'the younger ones' is redundant and 'they younger ones' is ungrammatical. Also pronoun agreement: use 'them' to refer to bikes. Sentence was a run-on; it needed splitting and clearer connectors. Suggestion: Break long sentences into clauses, use correct articles ('a lot'), use 'from different companies', and prefer 'popular with' or 'preferred by' for expressing preference.