Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise, correct grammar, and organize your response: start with a clear topic sentence, then briefly give a reason with one supporting detail. Avoid repetition and long awkward clauses. Use linking words (e.g., because, so) to connect ideas and correct tense and article use.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. However, I stopped riding it when I turned twelve because I was involved in a car accident while cycling. After that incident, I felt it was too dangerous to ride on busy roads, so I gave it up for safety reasons.

提案: Give a clear direct answer, then support it with specific reasons and examples. Use correct grammar (subject-verb agreement, remove repetitions), and linking words (for example, however, because). Keep to 2–4 sentences and include specific groups or situations to make your point clearer.

例: I don't think bikes are very popular in my country. Most people prefer public transportation or cars because urban areas are crowded and roads can be unsafe for cyclists. For example, office workers usually take buses or drive, while only a few people cycle for short trips near their homes.

× I did but once when I turned 12 I stopped using my bike to ride because it happened to be a dangerous for me as I once once happened to be in a car accident while I was riding my bike.

✓ I did, but when I was 12 I stopped riding my bike because it was dangerous for me; I had once been in a car accident while riding it.

The sentence mixes simple past and awkward phrasing. Use 'was' for past states ('it was dangerous'). Use past perfect 'had been' to show an earlier past event (the accident) that influenced the later action (stopping riding). Remove duplicated word 'once' and redundant phrases. Use a comma to separate clauses and a semicolon or conjunction for clarity. Suggestion: sequence events clearly with past perfect for the earlier event and simple past for the later outcome.

× Not really, I should say that because in my country most of the people using using using public transportation to travel, especially those people who are working in a HO office or so mainly in the roadside, most of the people using bikes and also car. So it's often to.

✓ Not really. In my country most people use public transportation to travel. Among those who work in offices or on the roadside, many use bikes or cars. So it's common.

Multiple issues exist, but corrections follow allowed problem types: quantifier and sentence structure. 'Most of the people' should be 'most people'. Use correct verb forms: 'use' not 'using' in this context (gerund misuse). 'Many' is the correct quantifier for countable nouns like 'people' and 'bikes'. Remove repetition and unclear phrases ('HO office', 'so it's often to') and replace with clear expressions. Break into shorter sentences for clarity. Use 'common' rather than 'often to'.