Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Correct the tense and make the reply more natural by using a clear topic sentence followed by a short supporting detail. Keep it under five sentences and avoid redundancy. For example, start with “Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.” Then add one reason or a short memory using a linking word (e.g., “and” or “so”).

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used to ride it to school and around the neighborhood, so I remember learning balance and confidence early on.

提案: Make the sentence more natural and specific. Start with a clear topic sentence saying whether bikes are popular, then give a specific reason or example using a linking word (e.g., “because” or “for example”). Avoid awkward phrasing like “their hobby is bicycle.”

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among teenagers, because cycling is an affordable and healthy way to travel. For example, many students ride to school and join weekend cycling groups.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The student used the present tense 'have' together with the past time phrase 'when I was a child.' This is a tense mismatch. Use the past tense 'had' to match the past time reference. Suggestion: use past tense for actions or states that occurred in the past (e.g., 'I had a bike').

× Yes, bikes are popular in my country, especially teenagers because their hobby is bicycle.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country, especially among teenagers because their hobby is cycling.

There are several issues: missing preposition 'among' before 'teenagers' and incorrect noun choice 'bicycle' to describe a hobby. Also 'teenagers' should be the object of 'especially among.' Use the gerund 'cycling' to describe the activity/hobby. Suggestion: include the preposition 'among' to link popularity to a group and use 'cycling' to refer to the hobby (e.g., 'especially among teenagers because their hobby is cycling').