Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid hesitation sounds (e.g., "umm") and repetition. Also correct tense and word choice (e.g., "when I was a child" instead of "when I tried"), and keep the answer to no more than four sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small red bicycle with training wheels, and I loved riding it around my neighborhood. Because I could travel farther and faster than on foot, I often rode to my friend’s house or to the park.

提案: Give a direct opinion then support it with specific reasons and a linking word. Avoid repetition ("biking" and "riding a bike" together) and grammar errors ("more faster" and incomplete ending). Use precise vocabulary like "commute," "common," or "convenient." Keep it to two or three sentences.

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country. For example, many people use bicycles to commute to work and school because they are cheap and help avoid traffic, so cycling is a convenient and common mode of transport.

× Yes, I had a bike when I tried and that was interesting because umm, when I use the bike, I can go, I can move more, faster.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child and that was interesting because when I used the bike, I could go faster and move more easily.

Mixed tense and modal errors: the sentence starts in past ('I had') but then shifts to present ('when I use', 'I can'), which is inconsistent. Also word order 'more, faster' is awkward and 'move more' needs an adverb like 'more easily'. Correction keeps past tense throughout ('was a child' clarified, 'used', 'could') and fixes word order. Suggestion: maintain consistent past tense when describing past experiences and use appropriate adverbs (e.g., 'more easily').

× Yes, definitely, because most people commute by biking by riding a bike, and as a result people can more faster moving to their.

✓ Yes, definitely, because most people commute by bike, and as a result people can move faster to their destinations.

Incorrect verb forms and redundant phrasing: 'commute by biking by riding a bike' is repetitive; use 'commute by bike'. 'Can more faster moving to their' mixes comparative form and adverb placement incorrectly and lacks an object for 'their'. Correction uses present simple 'commute' (habitual action), 'can move faster', and provides a noun 'destinations'. Suggestion: avoid redundancy, place comparative 'faster' after the verb, and supply a clear object (e.g., 'destinations').