Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答不够直接且有语法和用词错误，句子重复且冗长。建议先用一句话直接回答考官问题（肯定或否定并给出主体信息），然后用1-2句具体补充细节以支持论点。注意时态与冠词（例如：I kept a bike / I had a bike since kindergarten），避免重复词（去掉多余的“I”或“like”），并使用连词使句子流畅（e.g. because, so）。

例: Yes, I did. I had a bike from kindergarten because I was keen on sports, and my grandmother bought it for me as a present. I rode it almost every day around the neighborhood, which helped me build balance and confidence.

提案: 回答含糊且存在词汇错误（如把"sport"或"mode"误说成"spouse"），语法不通顺且信息不具体。建议先给出明确立场（Yes/No/It depends），然后用一到两句具体例子或原因支持你的观点。注意用正确词汇（popular, sport, mode of transport, cycling events），并使用连接词（for example, in urban areas, because）。

例: It depends. Bicycles are still popular in many Chinese cities as an inexpensive and eco-friendly way to travel, and there are also cycling events and bike-sharing programs in urban areas. However, in some places people prefer cars or electric scooters for convenience.

× Yes, I did remember I've kept by since my kindergarten school.

✓ Yes, I do remember I have kept it since kindergarten.

原句时态混用且代词使用错误。“did remember”与后文“I've kept”产生冲突，且“by”应为“it”。应使用现在时态表达现在仍记得并一直保留的状态，故改为“do remember”和现在完成时“have kept”。建议：当表示从过去某时持续到现在的动作或状态，用现在完成时（have/has + 过去分词）；若要强调现在仍记得，用“do remember”。另外“kindergarten school”冗余，简化为“kindergarten”。

× It's like when I was a child I I was like keen on sports so my grandma bought a bike for me as a present.

✓ When I was a child, I was keen on sports, so my grandma bought me a bike as a present.

原句存在冗余填充词（重复的“I I”、多次使用“like”）与标点缺失，导致句子结构混乱。把时间状语置于句首，主句保持简单陈述，宾语位置也应简洁（“bought me a bike”比“bought a bike for me”更自然）。建议：避免口语填充词“like”过度使用，保持句子主干清晰，并注意标点和重复词的删去。

× Well, I would not say it definitely, but it was quite a popular spouse in my country.

✓ Well, I wouldn't say that definitely, but bicycles were quite popular in my country.

原句中“spouse”用错，意为“配偶”，应使用“bicycles”或“bike riding”等；此外人称代词和指代不清（“it”与后文不一致）。把时态一致改为过去或泛指现在视上下文，此处用复数“bicycles”更自然。建议：核查词汇意义，确认名词是否正确；注意代词指代明确。

× Well, in some areas in China, there are a lot of activities about bikes so that.

✓ Well, in some areas of China there are a lot of activities related to bikes.

原句结尾“so that”用法不当且句尾不完整，应该用“related to”来表达“关于自行车的活动”。此外“areas in China”更自然为“areas of China”。建议：避免使用不完整的连接词短语，选择正确的介词短语（related to/about）并完成句子结构。