Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Focus on grammar, coherence and relevance. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question (e.g., “Yes, I did.”). Correct verb tenses and subject-verb agreement (“when I was a child,” “I had a bike”). Remove irrelevant details (you mention a bag) or link them clearly. Use one or two supporting details with linking words (for example, “so,” “and,” “because”) and avoid repetition. Keep the answer under five sentences and more natural phrasing: use past tense for childhood descriptions and add a brief reason or memory to enrich the response.

例: Yes, I did. I had a pink bike when I was a child, and I rode it to school almost every day because my school was nearby. I remember feeling proud of it and often racing with my friends after class.

提案: Answer directly and then give specific supporting details using linking words. Start with a clear topic sentence such as “Yes, bikes are very popular in my country.” Correct small grammar points (remove repeated words, use “I’m from China” or “I live in Shenzhen”). Provide specific reasons or examples (e.g., commuting, bike-sharing services, city layout) in one or two sentences. Keep it concise, avoid filler words like “uh” or repeated phrases, and organize ideas logically.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in China. In cities like Shenzhen many people use bikes and shared e-bikes for short commutes because they are cheap and convenient, and several dedicated bike lanes make cycling practical.

× Yes, when I were children, I have a bag, uh, it's a pink bag.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I had a bag; it was a pink bag.

The original sentence mixes singular/plural and tense. 'Children' (plural) conflicts with singular subject 'I'; use 'a child' with 'I was'. Also 'have' should be past tense 'had' to match 'when I was a child'. Use consistent past tense and singular noun: 'When I was a child, I had a bag.'

× And every day I ride a bike, come to school, come to school and I usually ride a bike.

✓ Every day I rode my bike to school, and I usually rode a bike.

The answer describes habitual actions in the past (childhood), so present tense 'ride' is incorrect. Use past simple 'rode' to match timeframe. Also avoid repetition; combine phrases for fluency: 'I rode my bike to school every day.'

× Of course, bikes are popular in in my country in yeah, my country is in China.

✓ Of course, bikes are popular in my country; I'm from China.

Redundant words and filler 'in in' and 'yeah' should be removed. Saying 'my country is in China' is incorrect; use 'I'm from China' or 'my country is China.' Maintain present simple 'are popular' which is correct, but simplify sentence structure for clarity.

× I from China and and I live in Shenzhen in this city is located in South of China.

✓ I am from China, and I live in Shenzhen. This city is located in the south of China.

Missing auxiliary verb 'am' in 'I from China' causes a sentence structure error. Remove duplicate 'and and'. The clause 'in this city is located in South of China' has incorrect word order and preposition use; correct to 'This city is located in the south of China.' Use 'the' with 'south' when referring to a region.