Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence and give one or two brief supporting details using linking words. Avoid unnecessary repetition and grammatical errors (use past tense correctly and include appropriate articles).

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. However, I sometimes borrowed my neighbor's bike to ride around the neighborhood, which helped me learn balance and confidence.

提案: Answer the question directly and then support your view with specific reasons or examples. Use clear linking words (for example, however, because, so) and simple correct sentences. Avoid unclear vocabulary and unnatural phrasing—talk about popularity, reasons for it, and where people travel instead.

例: I don't think bikes are very popular in my country because many people prefer fast public transport. For example, there is an extensive high-speed subway system, so people often choose trains or buses instead of bicycles for commuting.

× No, no, no, I didn't have before.

✓ No, no, no, I didn't have one before.

The original sentence is missing an object after 'have'; in English 'have' often needs a noun (a bike). Also 'didn't have before' is acceptable but sounds incomplete; adding 'one' clarifies meaning. This is a past tense negative using 'did not' + base verb, so keep past tense. Suggestion: include the noun or a pronoun (one) after 'have' to complete the sentence.

× Basically our very automation technology is very innovation, yeah.

✓ Basically, our advanced automation technology is very innovative.

The original sentence has multiple structure and word-choice problems: 'very automation technology' is incorrect noun phrase order; 'very innovation' uses the noun 'innovation' where the adjective 'innovative' is needed. Also 'very' should modify an adjective. Reordering to 'our advanced automation technology' and using 'innovative' fixes the sentence. Use commas to separate 'Basically' as a discourse marker.

× So that we are also using the high speed subway during the other grounds.

✓ So we also use the high-speed subway when traveling to other areas.

'So that' is misused; use 'So' or 'Therefore' to connect ideas. 'Using the high speed subway' is acceptable but 'high-speed' needs a hyphen as a compound adjective. 'During the other grounds' is incorrect preposition and noun choice; 'when traveling to other areas' or 'in other places' is correct. Also change continuous form 'are using' to simple present 'use' for habitual action. Suggestion: use appropriate preposition ('to' or 'in') and a suitable noun ('areas', 'places').