Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more grammatically accurate, reduce hesitations and filler words, and make your answer coherent with a clear topic sentence and 1–2 supporting details. Correct tense and phrasing (e.g., “I had a bike when I was a child”). Briefly add a specific memory or reason to enrich the response and use linking words if needed.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father gave it to me for my seventh birthday, and I remember being thrilled because I could finally cycle to the park by myself. After a few weeks of practice, I gained confidence and rode with my friends every weekend.

提案: Improve grammatical accuracy and clarity, avoid repetition, and provide specific reasons and examples. Start with a clear direct answer (Yes/No/Partly), then support it with 1–2 specific reasons and a brief example. Use correct nouns and phrases (e.g., “public transport” instead of “passport transport”) and avoid repeating words like “women's.”

例: Not really — bicycles are not very popular in my country. One reason is cultural: many people, especially women, are discouraged from cycling. Also, poor cycling infrastructure and long distances mean most families prefer cars or public transport, so you rarely see cyclists in cities.

× Yes, I had a bike when I'm child, umm, my father uh, gave to me for my 7th birthday.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child; my father gave it to me for my 7th birthday.

The sentence uses the present tense 'I'm' incorrectly; the speaker is referring to a past time so the past tense 'was' is required (Grammar Problem Type ID 6). Also 'gave to me' is unidiomatic; the correct object pronoun order is 'gave it to me.' Use a past-clause 'when I was a child' and combine clauses with proper punctuation for clarity. Suggestion: Replace 'I'm' with 'I was' and 'gave to me' with 'gave it to me.'

× I remember uh, I was uh, thrilled to uh, learn uh, how to write, how to write at.

✓ I remember I was thrilled to learn how to ride a bike.

The original repeats 'how to write' which is incorrect for riding a bike; context requires 'ride.' The clause 'I remember I was thrilled' correctly uses past tense memory of a past state, so maintain past tense (Grammar Problem Type ID 6). Also remove filler hesitations and the stray 'at.' Suggestion: Use 'ride a bike' as the verb phrase and remove fillers for clarity.

× In my country a bicycle is not very popular because of our social norm.

✓ In my country bicycles are not very popular because of our social norms.

The speaker uses singular 'a bicycle is' to refer to the general population; in English, when speaking generally about items, use the plural 'bicycles are' (Grammar Problem Type ID 1). Also 'social norm' should be pluralized to 'social norms' if referring to general cultural practices. Suggestion: Use plural nouns for general statements and match verb number accordingly.

× Women's, especially women's can't use bicycle because it's uncommon.

✓ Women, especially married women, often can't use bicycles because it is uncommon.

'Women's' is a possessive form used incorrectly; the correct plural noun is 'women' (Grammar Problem Type ID 12). Also 'can't use bicycle' needs an article or plural: 'use bicycles' or 'use a bicycle.' Clarify 'especially women's'—likely intent was a subgroup such as 'especially married women' or 'especially women' so provide clearer phrasing. Maintain subject-verb agreement and article usage. Suggestion: Use 'women' not 'women's,' add context for 'especially,' and use 'bicycles' or 'a bicycle.'

× So most people prefer car or passport transport.

✓ So most people prefer cars or public transport.

'Car' should be plural 'cars' when speaking generally, and 'passport transport' is incorrect; likely intended 'public transport' (Grammar Problem Type ID 1). Use parallel noun forms 'cars or public transport.' Suggestion: Replace 'car' with 'cars' and correct 'passport transport' to 'public transport.'