Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Correct the grammar and make the response more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then add one supporting detail (where or how you used it). Use linking words if you add details. Keep it to 1–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I often rode it to visit my friends in the neighborhood, and it was my main way of getting around during summer holidays.

提案: Be more concise and avoid fillers (e.g., "mmm", "uh"). Start with a direct opinion, then give one or two specific reasons and use linking words (e.g., "because", "however"). Correct small grammar errors ("an international sport", avoid repeating phrases). Limit to 2–3 sentences.

例: I don't think cycling is very popular in Malaysia because most people prefer badminton and football. For example, badminton has many public courts and national heroes, so more people play it recreationally and competitively.

× 'Yes, I have a bike when I was a child.'

✓ 'Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.'

'Have' is present tense and conflicts with the past time phrase "when I was a child." Use the past tense verb 'had' to match the past context. Suggestion: Use past simple for completed past states (I had a bike).'

× 'MMM, I'm from Malaysia and I don't think bikes are popular in my country.'

✓ 'MMM, I'm from Malaysia and I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country.'

'I'm from Malaysia' is fine, but 'bikes are popular' is acceptable; however, for clarity and register 'bicycles' and 'very popular' improve naturalness. The original tense is present and appropriate; this is a stylistic improvement rather than a tense error. Suggestion: choose consistent vocabulary and add qualifier if you mean somewhat unpopular.'

× 'Uh, So what I think is in my country, badminton as a sport is more popular in my country.'

✓ 'Uh, so I think badminton is more popular as a sport in my country.'

The original sentence has redundant phrases and awkward word order ('what I think is in my country' and repeated 'in my country'). Rearranging to 'I think badminton is more popular as a sport in my country' fixes structure and removes repetition. Suggestion: Keep subject ('I') followed by verb ('think') then the clause expressing the opinion.'

× 'Yeah, it's a international sport, like everyone will play.'

✓ 'Yeah, it's an international sport; for example, many people play it.'

There are two issues: article choice before a vowel sound ('an' not 'a') and the unnatural clause 'everyone will play.' 'Everyone will play' implies future inevitability; use 'many people play it' or 'lots of people play it' to state a general present habit. Suggestion: Use 'an' before 'international' and express general habits with present simple.'