Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve accuracy, grammar and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence (past tense), correct vocabulary (bike, not buy), and correct verbs (had, was shy → was young; teach → taught; how to ride). Keep it brief (1–3 sentences) and add one specific supporting detail (e.g., age or where you rode). Use linking words if adding details.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My mother bought it for me when I was about seven, and she taught me how to ride it in the park near our house.

提案: Focus on correct word choice and more precise reasons. Use present simple for general facts, correct spelling (bikes), and provide one or two specific supporting details (e.g., traffic, environment, cost). Use a linking word (because, for example) to connect opinion and reasons. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many people choose them to save money on fuel and avoid traffic. For example, commuters often cycle short distances in cities where parking is expensive.

× 'Yes I have a buy.'

✓ 'Yes, I had a bike.'

'buy' is a misspelling of 'bike' and the tense should match the past context of the question ('Did you have...'). Also add a comma after 'Yes' and use the correct article is not required here but correct noun form and past tense are needed. Suggestion: use 'I had a bike.' for past possession.'

× 'When I was shy my mom bought it for me and teach me to how to buy.'

✓ 'When I was young my mom bought it for me and taught me how to ride.'

'shy' is incorrect in context; 'young' fits age. The verbs must be in the past tense to match 'bought': 'teach' should be 'taught'. 'to how to buy' is ungrammatical; likely intended 'how to ride'. Remove the unnecessary infinitive marker 'to' before 'how to'. Also add a comma after the subordinate clause if needed. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense and use the correct verb 'ride'.'

× 'I think buys are popular in my country because many people nowadays usually ride a bicycle instead of private car to save money.'

✓ 'I think bikes are popular in my country because many people nowadays usually ride bicycles instead of private cars to save money.'

Plural nouns must be used consistently: 'buys' is incorrect for 'bikes'. When speaking generally, use 'bikes' or 'bicycles' (plural). Also 'a bicycle' and 'private car' should be plural to match 'many people': use 'bicycles' and 'private cars'. Additionally, consider removing both 'nowadays' and 'usually' together to avoid redundancy. Suggestion: use plural nouns when referring to many people and correct the noun form to 'bike' -> 'bikes'.