Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and use past tense for a childhood question, add a brief supporting detail and avoid single-word answers. Keep it within 1–3 sentences and use a linking word if you add extra information. For example, start with a clear topic sentence (‘Yes, I did’) then add one specific detail (where you rode it or who gave it to you).

例: Yes, I did — I had a red bicycle that my parents bought me when I was seven, and I used to ride it around the neighborhood every afternoon.

提案: Give a clear position, use complete sentences, avoid filler words (umm, of course) and redundancy, and add one or two specific reasons with linking words. Limit to 2–4 sentences and use present simple for general facts. For example, state whether bikes are popular generally, then support your view with concrete reasons (e.g., transport, recreation, urban cycle lanes) using linking words like ‘however’ or ‘also’.

例: I think bikes are popular mainly among children and recreational riders, but less so for daily commuting. For instance, many families buy bicycles for kids, and some people cycle for exercise or weekend trips; however, in cities with limited cycle lanes, fewer adults use bikes to commute.

× Yes, I have a bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike.

The examiner asked about the past ('when you were a child'), so the student should use past tense. Using present tense 'have' conflicts with the time reference. Use 'had' to match the past context. Suggestion: Pay attention to time markers in the question and match verb tense accordingly (e.g., 'I had a bike when I was a child').

× Actually, it is umm, for me, it is only popular when you are little.

✓ Actually, for me, bikes are only popular when you are little.

The sentence mixes 'it' with the plural noun 'bikes' and uses 'is' incorrectly. The correct subject 'bikes' requires the plural verb 'are'. Also remove unnecessary filler 'it is' and place 'for me' correctly. Suggestion: Use the correct subject and verb agreement and reduce fillers: 'For me, bikes are only popular when you are little.'

× Of course, you're just a kid who really wants to experience having a bike.

✓ Of course, you're just a kid who really wants to experience having a bike.

This sentence is grammatical and fits the context; no correction needed. It correctly uses 'you're' to address the listener and 'a bike' for a single bike experience. Suggestion: None; sentence is fine.

× And of course, if you grow up and you, you love doing biking, traveling through biking, of course you would like to umm, you.

✓ If you grow up and you still love biking and traveling by bike, of course you will continue to enjoy it.

The original is repetitive, fragmented and mixes tenses and phrases. Use a clear conditional structure: 'If you grow up and still love biking...' Match future consequence with 'will' for a general future outcome. Replace awkward phrases 'doing biking' and 'traveling through biking' with 'biking' and 'traveling by bike'. Remove trailing filler. Suggestion: Use concise phrasing and consistent tense: 'If you grow up and still love biking and traveling by bike, you will continue to enjoy it.'