Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar (tense and articles), reduce repetition, and provide a clearer, slightly longer but still concise response. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail using linking words. Correct tense: use past simple for past situations. Avoid filler words and repeated words.

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my family wasn't rich. However, I got a bike when I started junior high school, and it helped me travel to school more easily.

提案: Make the answer more natural by using a clear topic sentence, correct word order, and smoother linking. Give a specific reason and a brief example or comparison. Remove hesitations and repeat words; use present simple for general facts.

例: No, bicycles are not very popular in my country. Motorbikes are much more common because they are faster and more convenient for daily commuting, so most people prefer them for getting around.

× No, I don't have a bike because when I'm a child my my family not rich.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike because when I was a child my family was not rich.

This sentence has multiple tense and structure problems. The question asks about the past, so use simple past ('didn't have', 'was') rather than present tense 'don't' or 'I'm'. Also the subject 'my my' is a typo and the verb 'not rich' needs the auxiliary 'was' to form a correct clause. Suggestion: keep past tense consistently for past situations and include the auxiliary verb for adjectives (my family was not rich).

× So but when I get junior high school I have a bike.

✓ But when I got to junior high school I had a bike.

This sentence should describe a past event, so verbs must be in past tense: 'got' instead of 'get' and 'had' instead of 'have'. Also include the preposition 'to' after 'got' for correct collocation ('got to junior high school'). Suggestion: use simple past for completed past events and include necessary prepositions.

× Uh no, my in my country the bikes are not popular because more popular is motorbike because it's more convenient and fast.

✓ No, in my country bikes are not very popular because motorcycles are more popular; they are more convenient and faster.

Problems include incorrect pronoun placement ('my in my country') and awkward word order. Use 'in my country' at the start. Use consistent noun form: 'motorcycles' rather than 'motorbike' when comparing generally. Use comparative adjective 'faster' instead of 'fast' when comparing, and match verb forms: 'they are more convenient and faster.' Suggestion: place adverbial phrases (in my country) correctly, use plural nouns for general statements, and use comparative forms for comparisons.

× Most of of people will choose it.

✓ Most people choose them.

This sentence has a repeated word ('of of') and an inappropriate future/modal use 'will' for a general statement. For general habits or typical choices, use the simple present ('choose'). Also 'most people' is the correct collocation rather than 'most of people', and refer back to plural 'them' (motorcycles) rather than singular 'it.' Suggestion: remove duplication, use simple present for general truths, and ensure pronoun number agreement.