Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clearer and more grammatical: start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct tense and vocabulary (e.g., "I had" not "I have it" for past). Avoid unnecessary or unclear phrases. Keep to 2–4 sentences and use linking words like "also" or "when".

例: Yes. I had a bike when I was a child, and I still have one now. When I was younger I rode a three-wheeler before I learned to ride a regular bike, which helped me practise balance. Also, riding a bike became a daily activity for me.

提案: Give a direct opinion first, then support it with clear, specific facts or estimates. Use accurate grammar and linking words (e.g., "because", "for example", "about"). Avoid vague or confusing numbers. Keep to 2–4 sentences and use precise vocabulary such as "students" rather than "people" if referring to school.

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them for short trips. For example, I cycle to school every day, and about half of the students at my school ride bikes. This is mainly because cycling is cheap and convenient.

× Yes I have it and also I'm having right now and back is the I used to have a three Wheelers bike when I was charged.

✓ Yes, I had one when I was a child, and I still have one now; before that, I used to have a three-wheeler bike.

The student's sentence mixes tenses and uses incorrect verb forms. 'I have it and also I'm having right now' is awkward — possession is expressed with simple present 'I have' or past 'I had'. The phrase 'when I was charged' is incorrect; likely intended 'when I was a child'. 'Used to have' should refer to a past habitual possession. To improve, keep consistent tense and use correct nouns: 'three-wheeler' instead of 'three Wheelers', and 'child' instead of 'charged'. Suggestion: Decide whether you describe past or present possession and use 'I had', 'I have', or 'I used to have' accordingly. Use correct nouns and hyphenate compound nouns like 'three-wheeler'.

× It is really easy to learning the skill to active activity.

✓ It is really easy to learn the skill for this activity.

The phrase 'easy to learning' incorrectly uses the -ing form after 'to' which should be followed by the base verb (infinitive). 'Active activity' is redundant and unclear; use 'this activity' or name the activity. Improve by using the infinitive 'to learn' and a clear noun phrase: 'the skill for this activity'. Suggestion: After adjectives like 'easy', use 'to' + base verb (to learn), not 'to' + '-ing' form.

× I think so 'cause in my country I'm also go to school with my bike and we have earned 10,000 people in my school.

✓ I think so because in my country I also go to school by bike, and there are about 10,000 people at my school.

Several tense and structure problems: 'I'm also go' mixes present continuous with base verb; use simple present 'I also go' or 'I also ride'. 'Go to school with my bike' is better as 'go to school by bike'. 'We have earned 10,000 people' is incorrect; to state the school's population use 'there are about 10,000 people at my school'. Use 'because' instead of colloquial ''cause' in formal speech. Improve by using correct present simple forms and the existential 'there are' to indicate quantity. Suggestion: Use simple present for habitual actions ('I go' or 'I ride') and 'there are' to state numbers of people.

× But yeah, they are I think half of them coming with bike.

✓ But yes, I think about half of them come to school by bike.

The original mixes clause order and tense: 'they are I think half of them coming' is ungrammatical. For frequency/habitual actions use simple present 'come' not 'coming'. Use 'about half of them' to indicate approximation and 'by bike' for mode of transport. Reorder the sentence for clarity: 'I think about half of them come to school by bike.' Suggestion: Use simple present for general statements ('they come') and place 'I think' before the clause or say 'about half of them'.